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by Lawrenco 

Posted: 12 June 2004
Word Count: 236
Summary: On wednesday evening a Deer came into my path ,I almost ran it over as it aproached the road. This for me gives the poem some urgency. There is a definite,theme of Celtic Spiritualism in the poem. I hope you like it . " It`s a beautiful day"!!!

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Everything is going to be alright.
What has come before will, come again and is between us.
Go forth my friends, sow that silken thread,
be wed in union of higher fight.

Everything is going to be alright.
Gather the mind rubble that others leave behind.
Dutifully,masterfully,fill the encumbent rind with fruit.
Don`t be grinded by the faults,
left others blind;Leave the mess.
No more; re-de-fine.

Everything is going to be alright.
The nimbus cumulus,cloud fullness,grips the greater,
"soul compound",and grasps at the edges of its canopy.
Lets move on ...Tommorow a new dawn is horizing.
Take care of that full wound sky.

Everythings going to be alright .
Let all be fed,clothed and housed.
If it be beach hut ,a crafted latticed home.
A flat of delight,a house of your vision "on".
A buttress for your family form .
To give to the sustanence and where you feel fine.

Everything is going to be alright.
Leave you, your own;away from stares way.
To be free to be,who you ,actualy,really want to be.
Not to be others resonance,that is the question.
So deliver ,your way, our way,community way.

Everything is going to be alright.
Every thought I have for you ,like a gift not given,
flowers not sent,is a prayer from the stream within.
The spiritual sonar.Gods blessing splender?

Please be patient...Thanks for the "instrument".
THE WORLD.-Gives me that urgency!!!


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miffle at 19:00 on 12 June 2004  Report this post
Patrick, loved this and loved the rhythm: read to me like a great big hug ;-) Few thoughts:

* 'horizing' great coinage!
* 'sow that silken thread... fight' loved: almost thought you were going to write 'flight' (?) Just that the rest of the lines sort of made me want to take off ;-)
* 'cumulus': just like the word so much, had to give you the spelling (hope you don't mind!)
* 'rine rine' (?)
* 'Every thought... stream within': beautiful lines to make me weep ;-) Love that deep and pure...

'The spiritual sonar. God's blessing splender?'

reminded me that I'd spotted Hopkin's 'Pied Beauty' in the Forum for your group. Is this partly a response to his poem?

Well, even if it's not to me it has the same feel i.e. a celebration of creation - an uplifting poem... Threaded through with spirit and a gentleness ;-)

Think this is my favourite poem of yours that i've read so far. The rhymes work well, give it balance and coherence.

Write on, Nikki ;-)

gard at 18:59 on 13 June 2004  Report this post
Hi Lawrenco!

I agree with Miffle. I really like this there are some lovely phrases and the flow and rhythm is really good. I like the repetition of

Everything is going to be...

I did notice a couple of spelling errors? Did you write it straight off almost?

This is also one of my favourites of yours....


The Walrus at 08:28 on 15 June 2004  Report this post
I love the all encompassing visionary exhuberance of this poem, its eternal optimism and, I feel, solid realism.

Good accessible piece Patrick.


Lawrenco at 16:34 on 15 June 2004  Report this post
Thankyou Nikki,yes it does need some corrections!I was in a bit of a hurry when I posted .
I`m really happy that the poem moved you ;I see that as a real compliment.

Lawrenco at 22:05 on 16 June 2004  Report this post
Thanks Gina and Christina, I am glad that you both liked it .
I think it`s a first draught on this ,then again it may never change. Who knows?

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