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by roovacrag 

Posted: 08 June 2004
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Why did you hide your scars?
I really, truly didn't care.
Loved you for who you were,
not for what you thought you were.

You hid your scars
away from me,
covering them well.
Did I flinch,
when I broke the spell?
You know I didn't,
for I stayed the course,
driven by Love's force.

I kissed your body,
caressed it too -
because i was in love with you.
Traced my fingers through knotted flesh,
I didn't care, I saw perfection -
did you?

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The Walrus at 14:58 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
A very moving piece Stan. Love is indeed blind.


miffle at 15:31 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
Alice, yes scars add to someone's character...

Makes me think of:

Shakespeare's Sonnet with the lines 'Love is not love,/ which alters when it alteration finds/'

The scene in Hardy's 'Tess of the D'Urbervilles' where Angel Clare casts Tess off when he finds out about her illegitimate child / previous 'affair'... i.e. Does he, then, love her?!

And reminds me of a Ch 4 programme about a photographer. He photographed a lady in an Arctic landsape who had been badly scalded as a child - really she looked quite beautiful :-)

Kind regards, Miffle

A few technical thoughts:

* 'Loved you for who you were,
Not for who you thought you were' (?)

That is if you want all the poem to be in the past tense ?

* love's force

* 'I really truly didn't care' - lift the comma (?)

* 'Did I flinch/ when I broke the spell?' - not sure I can make sense of this: do you mean 'when you broke the spell?'

* 'knotted' - curious about your thoughts re. chosing this word. Sound slightly torturous, so for me links in to the scars (?)

miffle at 15:35 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
Alice, You would lose some of the narrative in this poem BUT I would be interested to seen the idea of the scars + the lover loving them in a poem in the present tense i.e. a totally new poem!
All the best, Miffle

Fearless at 16:13 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
Alice, a poem showing that quite often, love is not blind, but sees all the faults and does not mind. Perhaps it's time to write the 'Fisherman' series of poems. Just a thought, but also a feeling, that the time is right. Rgds, Woz

roovacrag at 16:17 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
red,nikki, Thank you both for comments.
Red ....yes love is blind.

Nikki.. been changed.
Going to write some now about my grand passion.
Hope....Will hurt me writing them....... Might put ghosts to rest.
11 years is a long time.
Next March would have been our 40th anniversary.
Still love the bugger,pipe and all. ;0))

Mooncat at 16:19 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
A very moving poem, Alice.

Liked it.

All the best,

roovacrag at 16:19 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
Wasim,thanks my dearest friend. Yes I will.

roovacrag at 16:45 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
Mooncat, this is real. Took me a long time for him to show me.
Loved him more after that.xx alice.

Nell at 16:57 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
Alice, sometimes I think that Fearless should be your user name as well as Woz's. A brave poem, you always surprise.


roovacrag at 17:16 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
Woz and I are both leo's and same sentiments in life.
Friends for years.... this poem is about my late hubby.

Woz is getting me to write more about Jack. Will be hard for me .
With Woz keep giving me the nudge, I will have to do something.
Even if it is a yorkshire pud thrown at him.

Might start a short story or novel, thanks to WW.
Will get feed back.
xx Alice

Nell at 17:27 on 08 June 2004  Report this post
Alice, I envy you with Woz to nudge you. (I mean poetically!) I'll look forward to that story.


gard at 19:35 on 13 June 2004  Report this post
Hi Roovacrag

emotional and deep, love is the conqueror of all fears!


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