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ACID WOMAN
Posted: 03 June 2004
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Acid woman
I am.
Evil I can be,
take care my friend,
cos, I'll take care of thee.
Tear you apart,
with bare hands,
limb from limb
blood in strands
flowing.
Dismember your body,
eat your brain.
Fry up your kidney,
liver the same.
Acid woman am i?
Take care.
Leave well alone,
touch him
beware,
I will eat you raw.
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 Account Closed at 14:17 on 03 June 2004
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Hi Alice,
nice, thought provoking poem. Time is a weird thing. It can defeat any object, it always wins out in the end. All we can do is make the most of our time before it runs out. Another great poem, I enjoyed reading it.
Ste
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roovacrag at 16:10 on 03 June 2004
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Thank you Steve.
Not my best. Next one will be and your type of poem.
Working on it and i can be evil bugger when i want.
xxxxxxxxxxx Alice
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Account Closed at 19:32 on 03 June 2004
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Urgh, Alice, fried kidneys, of any species is a horrible thought. This is completely different to the 'time' poem I read earlier. It was like a strange disorientating feeling as I read the new words that had replaced the old words. Had a kind of surreal reading effect to it that way.
Great use of the senses in this poem, made my stomach twinge.
Ste
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roovacrag at 19:40 on 03 June 2004
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Steve, was watching horror movies before you was a twinkle in dads eye.
Love the gory and yes i love eating kidneys, YUM.
xx Al
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Account Closed at 19:50 on 03 June 2004
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I wouldn't know, I've never met him.
But just who could I have been in a previous life? My money's on Lee Marvin :)
Ste
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Fearless at 20:08 on 03 June 2004
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Al
Interesting, but not enough violent anger or malice for me to retch, scream and cry. Why fry kidneys, when you can eat them raw, and let the blood run down your throat? Better yet, why not suck from the adrenalin gland? Hmmmm, maybe I should write a poem.....
....liked it
Fearless
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roovacrag at 21:09 on 03 June 2004
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Better to suck the venom from a womans throat.
Yes woz, think i could have thrown the acid and created a creature.
Not very good on the horror.
Stick to the jugular,and sex starved women who i can handle lol.;0)
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miffle at 21:40 on 03 June 2004
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Alice, you seem pretty good on horror to me! Never felt like this myself.
Liver (not human), I have heard is good for the blood (full of iron) not sure about the kidneys or indeed the brain(?).
Miffle
NB Do you need 'flowing' ?
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The Walrus at 21:53 on 05 June 2004
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ooo loved this Stan - such honest vitriol. Not enough of it about.
Well played.
Red
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 Nell at 13:24 on 06 June 2004
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Hi Alice, I didn't see the first version, but this is scary! And acid does eat into things, either slowly or quickly depending on the type and strength - this particular acid must be mighty powerful!
Nell.
<Added>
Forgot to say - especially liked the ...I am reversed to ...am I? at the end. Clever.
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roovacrag at 14:16 on 06 June 2004
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Nell,red,nikki.
Thank you for you remarks. A one off for me.Seen too many dracula films in the past.
xx Alice
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Lawrenco at 20:52 on 06 June 2004
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I immediatly think of the prison Aussie soap "Prisoners on Cell Block H".
One of the warders they used to call vinegar tits.
Portrayed as a bit of a nasty piece.
Not forgetting the song Man eater.
Be aware be very aware ...
A fun poem.
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roovacrag at 21:57 on 06 June 2004
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Lawrenco. never seen cell block H
But nasty piece sounds right.
Might be i had a good life and not a selfish one.
xx Al
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