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Tomorrow

by LONGJON 

Posted: 29 May 2004
Word Count: 74


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Once upon a wishing day, in the silent hour,
Between the not quite nighttime
And the not quite lighttime,
In that prickling silence, the heart awakes.

Awakes to a bed of tired sadness, wrapped
In the stifling grey of alone,
Senses the moment, cold as stone
As the ticking, crippling dawn arrives.

Arrives like a thief, commanding attention,
Arbeit macht frei
Are the words of the day,
Round the huts, the fences and chimneys.






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miffle at 10:25 on 30 May 2004  Report this post
LJ, loved the last verse here especially. A strong end: though I do not know what the 'words of the day' mean or which language they are in sound alone to me they seem a bit militant, stomp-stomp like (!?). Miffle

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meant 'they are in: in sound alone...'

roovacrag at 12:18 on 30 May 2004  Report this post
Second stanza did it for me. Great poem .
Well done
xx Alice

spud at 12:35 on 30 May 2004  Report this post
LJ

Found this very poignant. Very stark imagery, especially the last stanza - brings concentration camps to mind...am I right?

Spud

gard at 13:05 on 30 May 2004  Report this post
Hi LJ

"Work makes you free" - the iron gate over Auswchitz, the most horrible and hated words written at terminal Hell....

its memorial w/e in the USA with the unveiling of a long-awaited memorial for WWII. Its been big news.

Brilliant LJ!

G

joanie at 18:07 on 30 May 2004  Report this post
LJ, it hardly bears thinking about, does it? But we must keep remembering. Excellent.
joanie

Nell at 19:33 on 30 May 2004  Report this post
John, a great poem.

Nell.

LONGJON at 20:35 on 30 May 2004  Report this post
Hello everyone, and thanks for your comments. Its very easy, I think, for a poem to try to be "worthy" by association - hope that is not the case here.

Absolutely right, Gina, the most sardonic, vicious demonstration of the culpable insanity that was Nazism. I guess the issue is 'could it ever happen again' - what concerns me is the answer is yes.

John P.

gard at 22:45 on 30 May 2004  Report this post
Hi LJ

yes I can see that happening especially with the escalating paranoia that is starting to choke everyone

G

LONGJON at 02:52 on 31 May 2004  Report this post
Hi Spud,

Yes, unfortunately, you certainly are right, Auschwitz.

John P.


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