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Gifted
Posted: 26 May 2004
Word Count: 49
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Their scent imbues the air with jasmine
their flavour fuses –
salt of appetite with syrup of life,
their texture touches cheek with smoothest peach,
their haunting melody quivers its essence
through man and woman alike.
Time is blindfolded as I bathe
in the warm water of your words.
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 joanie at 16:11 on 26 May 2004
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I love the thought that 'time is blindfolded'; 'I bathe in the warm water of your words'. Lovely; I can feel myself drifting.......
joanie
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 roovacrag at 16:42 on 26 May 2004
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Beautiful.Third line said a lot.
So did the last two lines.
Well done red daughter.
xxxxxxxxx Red mum
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Mooncat at 08:46 on 27 May 2004
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Hi Walrus,
Lovely choice of words. Particularly liked the last two lines.
Also, great use of aliteration.
Mooncat
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Fearless at 11:01 on 27 May 2004
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Red
A letter from one lover of lyrical language to another, shaking the foundation of the Earth, but at the same time, rustling the leaves in the trees that I see. Gentle, tingling the senses and sweet. I adore the last two lines, for expression such as this is timeless.
Write on,
Fearless
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miffle at 11:27 on 27 May 2004
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'Gifted': great title! You are gifted, the lyricist is gifted - and words and expression are gifted: often the most heartfelt (and therefore treasured) gifts that we can give. Oh, and they're also free - not a bad deal really! All the best, Miffle
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CrazyPete at 19:28 on 30 May 2004
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I loved it! Well done C. Very sensual. Particularly loved the line about time being blindfolded, when 2 people join together - time becomes meaningless only the moment matters. That said, time is always the enemy as Rutger Hauer ad-libed in bladerunner
'memorys lost, like tears in the rain.'
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The Walrus at 09:02 on 01 June 2004
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Thanks Pete, liked your paradoxical thoughts on 'time' and the wonderful quotation.
Thanks for commenting.
C.
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