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A Little Sacred Air

by John G.Hall 

Posted: 23 May 2004
Word Count: 83
Summary: non free-verse for a non-free nurse..

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A Little Sacred Air

A cool breeze slipping
through the summer heat,
your slender fingers
looped around my wrist,
taking my pulse with you
my heart's parting gift.

The train is slowly drawing out
pulling away along a needle track,
syringing you from Oxford Road
a beat's worth of blood revoked.

Today as children wait for the 8.38
& office workers step from the 7.45,
I see your space still there, a saved
place out of time, a little sacred air.

John G.Hall(c)2004

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joanie at 19:02 on 23 May 2004  Report this post
Beautiful, John. I love the idea of 'your space .. a little sacred air', while life is going on as normal. Lovely, very poignant.

Lottie at 19:14 on 23 May 2004  Report this post

The imagery in this saddens me - it's really elegant and I had to reread several times because it's that good.

'You leave syringed away from me along the needle track marks left in time"

In your second stanza has real meaning.

Thank you for posting this :-)


Nell at 07:16 on 24 May 2004  Report this post
John, so quiet and beautiful, an intense evocation of a moment in time - like a slowed film - the last three words in each stanza profound, perfect.


The Walrus at 18:50 on 24 May 2004  Report this post
Such gentleness and grace, almost reverential.

The Walrus

Marlo at 09:18 on 02 June 2004  Report this post
Hi John

To be honestI am not really sure what the poem was about, as it made me think about a few things.

What came to mind was beauty and extreme sadness.

Thank you.


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