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The Sailor On The Seas Of Fate
Posted: 20 May 2004
Word Count: 62
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The Sailor On The Seas Of Fate.
To drift amongst the tides of man
Becalmed on the uncertain seas of humanity
I wait for a breeze to stir
A fresh wind of circumstance to restart my journey
Far across the lonely waters of indifference
To the distant shores of a kindred spirit
And into the safety of the harbour of another’s soul.
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 Nell at 19:35 on 20 May 2004
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Hi Pete, welcome to WriteWords. Love the sea metaphor in this poem, somehow the poet becomes for me the boat rather than the sailor, and the imagery takes on a literal and therefore a surreal aspect, with him adrift on a sea of upturned faces. Especially liked A fresh wind of circumstance, which raises the question as to whether we are at the whim of fate or partially in charge of our own destiny. ...the lonely waters of indifference... evocative, I can see a calm yet empty sea now. The idea of coming home and 'resting' in another is one that sometimes appears in the work of authors and poets, particularly the more traditional ones. Perhaps it's a basic human need. Quiet and rather beautiful as he waits for the wind to stir, and the reader is moved to hope that he'll find that safe harbour.
Nell.
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 roovacrag at 20:24 on 20 May 2004
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Hi Pete,
Welcome to WW.
Very good piece here,enjoyed it.
Well thought out and it flows well.
Hope you join WW,would like to read more.
xx Alice
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 joanie at 06:35 on 21 May 2004
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Welcome, Pete. This is lovely. I like how it begins, but particularly 'a fresh wind of circumstance to restart my journey'. The whole thing is beautiful, with every word exactly right. It sounds very hopeful; I am left feeling calm, not despondent.
joanie
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The Walrus at 08:04 on 21 May 2004
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Agree with the comments above, a beautiful, gentle poem.
Look forward to reading more.
The Walrus
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miffle at 23:18 on 21 May 2004
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Hello there Pete,
Liked this! Some thoughts:
* Especially liked the 4th line because 'circumstance' seems so perfectly placed i.e. right in the middle of a poem that it seems central too.
* Yes, a gentle lull to this poem, a sense of acceptance, a sense of hope though also a sense that there may have been storms and anger in the past...
* Very much like the way that people/ a relationship is only gently hinted at - for me the word 'indifference' is the first hint...
'In the doldrums but hopeful that the wind will pick up soon' kind of poem...
Welcome to WWords! Miffle
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