SPACECHILD A spatial child - A child of space.
Posted: 17 May 2004
Word Count: 38
Summary: Dedicated to my literary mentor, muse, muscle. Wozzie x
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Speeding, starlit spermatozoa,
motile stellar fluid,
shooting Saturnian rapids,
conjoined, Earthly egg.
Uranus tilt, womb cradle,
Neptunes wetness, wrapped,
suspended galactic liquid,
seared Venutian nurture.
Growing, Plutonic distance,
propelled Mercurial momentum,
blood red, Martian path,
startled solar outing.
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 roovacrag at 12:49 on 17 May 2004
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Great one,
was gob smacked as i read it,but i loved it.
Woz does bring the best out in people.
Well written,well said in every way.
Well done.
xx Alice
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miffle at 19:38 on 18 May 2004
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Angela, a dynamic conflagration of contradictory images indeed! - Perhaps an account of his conception? Or of something else fertilised... imagination perhaps?
A fizzling piece and a journey through the solar system - did you leave any planets out? Wondered if in the light of this thought you might capitalise the 'E' of 'earthly' too? Also read 'Plutonic' as 'Platonic' first - which I found interesting.
Just a few thoughts, Nikki :-)
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literati at 20:19 on 18 May 2004
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Oops, an Earthly error! Thanx Nikki! Did not leave any planets out. Each planets special points were used as metaphors for the process of birth to conception. Hey presto, a spacechild! Angela
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Fearless at 20:00 on 22 May 2004
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Angela
A lyric that conjures up pearly whites, cocoon reds with soothing rhythm of womb; a succinct crystalisation of the journey from conception to birth. I love the last line. Many thanks for the dedication.
Wozzie
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literati at 14:36 on 23 May 2004
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No, thank you Wozzie, for your dedicated and total support! Best Ange x
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Account Closed at 21:02 on 23 May 2004
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Hi Angela, the title caught my curiosity, so I had to read this. This is really good stuff. How can 38 words be so beautiful, powerful, meaningful and yet, at the same time, create a dynamic atmosphere? But you've done it.
As everybody gets their own reactions to a piece of art, my reactions and feelings were that this poem is an erotic, sexy, sci-fi poem with strong sexual tones of liquid nature.
It was great to read, and much more powerful than you think.
Can't wait to read more,
Ste
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literati at 09:47 on 24 May 2004
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Thanx Ste, never thought it may be perceived as science fiction. You are right of course, glad you enjoyed it. Angela
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