Lazy Sunday
Posted: 16 May 2004
Word Count: 23
Summary: Just how it is, right now......!
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Just a lazy, bee-buzzing,
lawn-mowing, car-washing,
bird-singing, sheet-flapping,
wine-drinking, limb-burning,
steak-grilling, hammock-swinging,
paper-reading, breeze-blowing,
sun-shining, seed-drifting,
plane-circling, glass-chinking,
cat-napping, poem-writing,
peaceful
Sunday
afternoon.
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 Nell at 07:37 on 17 May 2004
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Joanie, it was a lovely Sunday! Strangely though the poem left me with the feeling that you'd been busy - was that the repetition of all those 'ing' sounds or the inclusion of the car-washing and lawn-mowing? Like the echoes of sound and image that run throughout: lazy/buzzing; singing/drinking; burning/grilling; drifting/circling - each seeming to refer to the other, as if the bees were lazy, the birds drunk, you were grilled and the plane was a sort of seed. Nice one, write on,
Nell.
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 The Walrus at 09:17 on 17 May 2004
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See what Nell means about you sounding busy - with the 'ing' words - wonderered whether that was intentional - contrasting as they do with the last three words? Anyway, sounds like a perfect Sunday! Well captured.
The Walrus
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 joanie at 09:29 on 17 May 2004
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Thanks, Nell and The Walrus. Yes, I think I was listening to the buzzing first, then became aware of all the other things. I was working, actually, in the shade of the apple tree, with bits of blossom dropping onto the keyboard of my laptop, when I thought, "This is ridiculous - I should be writing something instead of working!" It was very peaceful, actually.
Thanks for your responses.
joanie
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poemsgalore at 18:29 on 18 May 2004
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Wow, this is full of action, and conjures up some really great images Joanie, more like this please.
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joanie at 18:46 on 18 May 2004
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Poemsgalore - thank you again! I appreciate your response.
joanie
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