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Broken

by joanie 

Posted: 14 May 2004
Word Count: 139
Summary: I was eating dinner, alone, thinking of the Jeremy Hooker... I can never resist the crusty roll .. it was poppy seeds...


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It had seemed so ordinary
at every other time;
hardly worthy of note,
a common, humble addition,
excellent but invisible
in its simplicity.
But now I saw its true worth -
A celebration of the elements of life.
I felt the jocund sea breeze which
tempered the sun's rays;
I saw those hands which toiled
despite the harshest elements.
Man's ingenuity, his inventiveness,
driving him back to the beginnings
of time itself. The sustainer of Life.
I was part of the rain-drenched earth;
I basked in its life-giving beneficence.
But more. Now I feel life in everything;
the sun-warmed stone I touched today,
witness to a million years of simply being.
And this is Life’s gift to me.
The staff of life, His body, broken,
and I am engulfed in a seeded, multigrain,
ciabatta, unleavened, celebration
of Mother Earth.









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Nell at 08:47 on 15 May 2004  Report this post
Joanie, just popped in today meaning to look for a moment but not comment - big day, my son's getting married - but I read this and... Fantastic, I loved it, the words at the end tumbling out in a joyous celebration of life. Wonderful!

Nell.

joanie at 08:51 on 15 May 2004  Report this post
Thank you Nell! I hope you have a wonderful day. The weather here is glorious. I hope it is with you.
joanie

joanie at 15:25 on 15 May 2004  Report this post
Thanks, G. Yes, it's amazing, isn't it? I was thinking on exactly those lines when I wrote, "..back to the beginnings of time itself". Thanks for your response!
joanie

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..and thanks for the link, too!

The Walrus at 08:42 on 17 May 2004  Report this post
I also liked this Joanie, as Nell says 'a joyous celebration of life'.

The Walrus

joanie at 09:31 on 17 May 2004  Report this post
Walrus, thank you. Much appreciated.

miffle at 09:44 on 17 May 2004  Report this post
Joanie, enjoyed this. A few thoughts:

* 'Broken' - curious title, which I liked - I sort of expected a different poem: i.e. you/ the speaker does not seem 'broken' at all - in fact, the opposite - sustained by The Ciabatta of Life ;-)

* 'humble' - great word! Sounds quite Dickensian to me (am sure there's a lot of bread eating in Dickens or am I imagining things?!) Echoes of paupers -

* 'excellent' - was the one word I wondered about here (?) Wondered what you meant precisely ? i.e. 'excellent' didn't seem to do your bread justice (?)

* like the way the poem moves from the roll outwards and onwards back into Time and into the spiritual too. Like the idea of the speaker wondering how the 'roll' came to be... i.e. all the energy, toil, work of the elements that has gone in to it.

* seemed a very thankful poem and yes, there is always much to be thankful for. The ciabatta which is spirit for sure.

Great stuff! Nikki :-)

joanie at 10:46 on 17 May 2004  Report this post
Thanks for your thoughts, Nikki.
The title refers to the bread; I always think it feels very significant, spiritual, almost - to break a bread roll.
Yes, 'humble' - I suppose I was thinking about a type of Dickensian poverty, where bread was often the only food.
I'll think about 'excellent'. I know what you mean.
Thanks again.
joanie

LONGJON at 00:35 on 18 May 2004  Report this post
You know, Joanie, I have long harboured a secret desire to be a baker and bake only the older types of loaves, the big crusty cobs, the tear apart type of loaves that go with a large, hot bowl of leek and potato soup in the winter. I think you have started me off again! I absolutely love fresh well made bread, as well made as your poem!

John P.

joanie at 08:38 on 18 May 2004  Report this post
Thank you, John, for your comment. Much appreciated.
joanie


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