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Dusk

by Beanie Baby 

Posted: 13 May 2004
Word Count: 24
Summary: Thought of this one evening as I wandered down our local market. It's very short. what do you think?
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A busy day ends.
The street, thronged with people,
becomes so quiet.
The rubbish is cleared away.
The traders have departed.
Market Day over






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halfwayharry at 00:31 on 14 May 2004  Report this post
I like. Very evocative. And I don't tend to like poetry so count yourself lucky Beanie baby.

Peter
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roovacrag at 22:24 on 15 May 2004  Report this post
Good one and straight to the point.
Good poem.
I liked it very much.
xxAl
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gard at 19:09 on 16 May 2004  Report this post
Hi Beanie B


nice stage or images here, could almost be a picture

G
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The Walrus at 08:39 on 17 May 2004  Report this post
I liked this very much but I would suggest you could do more with it by adding colours, textures and sounds, maybe some imagery. Just a thought.

The Walrus
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Beanie Baby at 21:32 on 15 June 2004  Report this post
Thanks guys for your helpful comments - sorry I haven't responded sooner. I didn't realise anyone had commented on it. Hope you're all writing crazily!
Much love,
beanie
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