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Small Pain
Posted: 06 May 2003
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small pain
like tooth ache
in my body
hurting me
tiny pills
like candy
in my body
helping me
little better
like magic
in my body
healing me
more pain
than yesterday
in my body
hitting me
tiny pills
like bullets
in my body
harming me
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 Shadowgirl at 18:55 on 06 May 2003
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WOW - seems you have summed up life in that one Ros! Very clever and very thought provoking too. Where do you get the ideas from for your poetry? Or do they just come in a flash?
Great stuff!
Shadowgirl
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Rosalind at 19:17 on 06 May 2003
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Hi Shadowgirl,
Thanks once again for being so nice about my work.
My poetry is all written in response to something that is going on my life. I have a need to caputure those feelings on paper. Sometimes that is by writing a poem.
This piece is a reaction to pain I feel, and the pills that I take to stop the pain. I often worry about taking pills over a long period of time.
You is me dealing with feelings I have left over from a relationship that ended a long time ago.
Love Poem was written because I fell in love with my fiancee all over again after coming out of a depression
untitled was written after the bodies of Holly Wells and Jessica Chapman were found.
I never work very long on a poem. Maybe I should work longer, but the need to get my feelings down takes over. I find I can't write poetry on paper, but only when I am sat at a computer.
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Shadowgirl at 20:04 on 06 May 2003
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Thanks for sharing that Ros!
I don't have your talent for poetry, but I do write in the same way as you, and for the same reasons. No, don't work on it for longer. My personal opinion is that then the emotion may fade, it is the raw emotion beneath the excellent constructed words and sentences, which has always attracted me to your work strongly. I think I might have said before (if I didn't I certainly meant to) that your work makes me FEEL and I love to feel.
Thank you for sharing - and I so understand, my feelings I have to put onto paper also. Hope it helps you, as it often does me.
Your work has a fantastic quality which others, even very successful writers may not have, it is real!
Shadowgirl
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 Stacey at 16:12 on 07 May 2003
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Hi Rosalind,
I really liked the rhythm in this poem. Very descriptive, yet easy to take in and understand, and I love the raw element of it.
Great stuff - Stacey.
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olebut at 17:12 on 10 May 2003
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a nice description of the emotions that you obviously have or are going through. sometimes revising an initial draft spoils the immediacy of it and dilutes the emotion, nice poem thank you for sharing it with us
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GC at 13:22 on 13 May 2003
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As a person who relies on painkillers for a neck injury - you've summed this one quite beautifully!
Looking forward to reading more of your work!
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Dark One at 10:54 on 23 July 2003
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Hi Rosalind,
I have been reading your work recently and I am extremely impressed. I especially like this piece for despite its poetic simplicity, it manages to capture the danger of pill addiction and how it is so easy. The pill at first is the cure but soon it becomes the thing that is harming you the most.
Dark One
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