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Mastering Rothko
Posted: 22 April 2004
Word Count: 46
Summary: the art of age....
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Mastering Rothko
an old master
of broken pencils,
is drawing up
a bathroom escape,
blue veins doodled
down his canvas,
the frame warped
by maximum gravity,
passions cave hid
under stomach falls,
a body of works
quietly mastering
the new medium
of tempera skin.
John G.Hall(C)2004
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 Skeetr at 18:23 on 24 April 2004
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John -- strikingly 'drawn' image of aging, the very etching of it on the man's skin, sagging passions, warped canvases of skin. I liked this a lot.
(though, after reading it a couple of times, I still don't catch the 'escape' image in the bathroom -- bathroom + escape = suicide, to me--? that may just be my mind taking leaps?)
If I may venture a preference -- since "an old master" is the opening line, I'd have thought your summary phrase "The Art of Age" would be a stronger title. But, again, just personal taste there maybe.
Smith
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Tina at 10:06 on 25 April 2004
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Hi John
Strong images here and a strong themes which many of us can relate to !!!
I like the short lines as they reflect the limitations of age (to me anyway). I thought the opening is great and has a powerful impact but also (like above) not sure about bathroom image - clearly you are looking in the bathroom -but maybe that line doesn't quite fit in there????
OR Maybe you don't need the word bathroom at all.
Great images -thanks
Tina
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miffle at 11:56 on 25 April 2004
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John, the certainly reads ominous to me:
* 'is drawing up/ a bathroom escape'
* 'the frame warped / by maximum gravity'
especially. A heaviness held in the poem... A falling down feel echoed in the structure.
'Bathroom' - one of the only places in the house with a lock on the door, where you can find some privacy... A private place for things that must not be disturbed... Also the place where sinister things that could turn sinister are often kept - pills, cutting things...
A detached view... A sketch of a psychological drama... Mysterious poem with a cut to it... 'under stomach falls' the only part that was slightly curious to me...
Write on, Miffle
<Added>
ok - so literally - I can see the 'stomach falls'... If I'm reading it as a picture of 'age' but 'bathroom escape' still had an edge to it...
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The Walrus at 14:16 on 25 April 2004
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Liked this very much John, the words jump out and paint a very vivid picture. Reminded me of Larkin's 'The Fox' (think that's the correct title).
The Walrus
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John G.Hall 
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