Scientific nonsense. RLG.
Posted: 05 April 2004
Word Count: 91
Summary: I do worry about myself sometimes ,its ever since I started drinking that herbal tea!A bit avant- garde.
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Outside,the bone of the moon glows,
but within,we lie destroyed in the dark.
Mustn`t grumble though or stumble.
In light deprived I will survive.
Chasing tiny imagined pieces of illume;
to bacteria bloom(faster growth see)pursuaded to be reality.
By scientist who like white coats imagined;fancy that round these parts!
Docs. are quite away from this very hypochondriacal,hue!
White=light=l. l+l+l+l+l+imagination=Reality of thought+
particles of imagination,meditating them on2 reality=
Imagined ,formed, reality!
If it doesn`t work you imagined light!
Inspite of gobbledy gook type.
Ho,ho,back to stygian gloom.sigh..
chant soon for Alpha centauri!
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 word`s worth at 10:27 on 06 April 2004
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Oh Patrick! I'm not sure if that was your intent...but this made me laugh. What's in your herbal tea?? I'm intrigued by the workings of a mind that would create this...well, Scientific Nonsense...!
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I will survive! I'm sorry that's got me going on a Gloria Gaynor tangent!
My apologies for not giving any constructive comments on this, but I'm not sure how to go about it!! All I can say is I found it fun!
'gobily gooch' = funny
Nahed :D
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roovacrag at 15:45 on 06 April 2004
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Enjoyed this,
not sure whether u had a few to drink on this,before you wrote it.
Made me laugh,made my day. thats what poetry is all about.
xx Alice
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Sue H at 16:32 on 06 April 2004
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You'd give Edward Lear a run for his money. Good fun!
Sue
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Lawrenco at 17:34 on 06 April 2004
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Thanks wordsworth,alice and sue.
Glad you liked it ;yes just a bit of fun I supose with some pseudo depth ,inspired a little by Marlowes; Dr Faustus apart from that I havent got any excuses.
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Thanks for comment Sam,oh and my spelling shames me!!!
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swandale at 18:38 on 06 April 2004
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Hmmm, very...odd! Like a mind being bombarded by science, started off coherent and descended into gobbledy gook! Made me laugh.
Sam
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bjlangley at 11:40 on 07 April 2004
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How very bizarre! I have to say, I did like this part:
Mustn`t grumble though or stumble.
In light deprived I will survive.
But then again, I'm a sucker for rhymes.
I think this is the first poem in which I've seen a mathematical formula, albeit a crazy one, which does seem to make some kind of sense!
All the best,
Ben
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Ellenna at 17:04 on 07 April 2004
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this must come from a thoroughly quirky and original mind :) I like it!
Ellie..
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Lawrenco at 17:32 on 07 April 2004
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Thanks Ben and Ellie, Thanks for ya coments .Ben I havent had any experience of being successful with this scientific formula,but it would be my guess that you would have to really want it to work.Ellie its nice to hear from you again ,flattery is always shamelessly aprieciated.
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Fearless at 16:00 on 08 April 2004
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An insanely playful rhythm. Continue to get down n funky my lyrical friend,
fearless
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Elspeth at 17:00 on 08 April 2004
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I'm all for anything that reminds us we're all a little crazy.
Great fun. Katie.
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Lawrenco at 17:33 on 09 April 2004
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Thanks Katie, However I try to take things seriously I never can.I enjoyed your comment.
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Seahorse at 17:46 on 14 April 2004
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I'm all for anything that shatters convention, even if I don't understand a word of it!
Made me laugh too - possibly out of bemusement more than anything, but isn't poetry all about provoking reactions?
So it works! More "avant-garde" would be great.
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miffle at 18:13 on 14 April 2004
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Hee hee hee - a relaxed brain I feel ;-) sort of a flip-flop floating on the sea... Sort of thing that I could imagine Spike Milligan composing, singing, being chuff chuff chuffed about... seems non-censored, non-edited, this is me folks, splurge. Free, very free... and this is good Miffle ;-)
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gard at 13:30 on 25 April 2004
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Hi Lawrenco
I like the phrase "bone of the moon" made me think for a while
I enjoyed reading this, loved the formula stanza kind of fun and bubbly.
Only one thing..Not sure what
"Docs. are away from these hypochondrial..."
means.
If you mean there are no Drs in science? Not sure, if this is so, its incorrect...
G
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Lawrenco at 20:42 on 25 April 2004
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gard. The piece is a nonsense,I bring the scientists in to show the level of despair and resorting to humour to overcome the crisis.No disrespect Dr`s. in the poem are a semblance of saviour, just out of reach of our intrepid hero ,clambering out of the darkness.
There lies the tickling homour...
I think it is only quasi-science, used in the poem.
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