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Buddha made of terracotta
Posted: 02 April 2004
Word Count: 56
Summary: a godless garden
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Buddha made of terracotta
The terracotta buddha
guards a garden's calm,
blackbirds blessing him
with white dabs of bird.
Wearing the weather,
fitted with leaf & twig
snails glossed on lips
eyes covered in web,
his nature redressed.
A soft red man baked
by hard western hands,
casting slow shadows
across short cut grass.
John G.Hall(C)2004
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 Skeetr at 13:20 on 02 April 2004
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Wonderful poem, John. "with white dabs of bird" was so unexpected, a solid image. And the last stanza is spare and complete -- very full image.
Just lovely,
Smith
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 joanie at 20:08 on 02 April 2004
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I read the other 'buddhas' and didn't comment, ........... but as I continue to read, I am feeling more and more inclined to 'add my bit'. I just love the 'white dabs of bird', 'eyes covered in web', but especially the last stanza.... lovely
joanie
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olebut at 07:56 on 03 April 2004
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John
one of the beauties of poetry is that poets look at every day scenes and describe or create an image in such a totally diferent but extremely effective way form the images or description that most see.
You have achieved that with this piece, thank you
take care
david
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 Nell at 07:56 on 03 April 2004
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John, 'a godless garden' is asking to be poem too. Like joanie I read the other Buddhas, and am being drawn in. I love this, it has the feel of haiku - a less is more philosophy, and I wanted to be in that garden. 'Eyes covered in web' dismayed me, but only because I'm working on a villanelle with the line 'the web you spin is covering my eyes...' 'A soft red man/baked by hard western hands' - every line is so telling it's difficult to choose.
Nell.
<Added>
Sorry, I miss-typed the line break, it should be: A soft red man baked/by hard western hands...
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Ellenna at 10:32 on 03 April 2004
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This is absolutely beautiful... it gives a picture of undisturbed calm..and nature at work..
Ellie...
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