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<A Season In Hellii>
Posted: 01 April 2004
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<A Season In Hellii>
You wake up
Follow the time
No bible in hand
A piece of patisserie rotted
My skin left on you
A stranger's face
Yersterday wasn't pale
A season in hell
Darkness wears a tutu turning around
No stream flirts with a drunk boat
No sinner gathered
Sun is absent
Winter invited summer to come
Spring's jaw down
Fall falls with lonely sound
A season in hell
Bodies knot
Tireness not
Wake up
Your face appers not
Blank painting
Rain runs into my veins
Sleep a sleep
A transparent dream
A season in hell
Hands hold not
Nothing attacks my fort
Frozen soil
Blissfully bites my feet
feu de joie
An honored lamster
Up wake, up
Birds stole my tart
Steal a kiss over my lips
Your color is on me
Unfailing breath blows my walls
Shake the sheet
You disappeared underneath
Wake up ,up
My Muse is drawing a mouse potato
Fill me with loveliness
A season in hell
Sleep a sleep
No gate to Mecca
Wake up
Wake me up
No gate to hell
Baptiseed in a coffee bath
Follow time
Head to Halidom
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 roovacrag at 06:22 on 02 April 2004
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Welcome to WW.
I enjoyed this very much.
Different, well written, a joy to read .
Words flowed easily off the tongue.
Well done
xx Alice
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 Avalive at 07:01 on 02 April 2004
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<A Season In Hellii>
You wake up
Follow the time
No bible in hand
A piece of patisserie rotted
My skin left on you
A stranger's face
Yersterday wasn't pale
A season in hell
Darkness wears a tutu turning around
No stream flirts with a drunk boat
No sinner gathered
Sun is absent
Winter invited summer to come
Spring's jaw down
Fall falls with lonely sound
A season in hell
Bodies knot
Tireness not
Wake up
Your face appers not
Blank painting
Rain runs into my veins
Sleep a sleep
A transparent dream
A season in hell
Hands hold not
Nothing attacks my fort
Frozen soil
Blissfully bites my feet
feu de joie
An honored lamster runs
Up wake, up
Birds stole my tart
Steal a kiss over my lips
Your color is on me
Unfailing breath blows my walls
Shake the sheet
You disappeared underneath
Wake up ,up
My Muse is drawing a mouse potato
Fill me with loveliness
A season in hell
Sleep a sleep
No gate to Mecca
Wake up
Wake me up
No gate to hell
Baptiseed in a coffee bath
Follow time
Head to Halidom
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Avalive at 07:02 on 02 April 2004
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sorry, i posted again cuz i need to edit it,but i was not allowed to.so...thanks for ur comment.
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Avalive at 07:13 on 02 April 2004
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I'm a part member. So I can only post one peom. I'm going to post the seocnd one just right below. Wondering can people see it from here...whatever,not many people who liked this second poem...but I do.
< A walk Along the Seine >
Seine senses December's tang
Faint faint is the sun
Farewell Mayan travellers
A thousand face
Each becomes a song
Take a picture of a ripple
Cloud invades the flows
Grandfather waits for a son
A lady coughs in smoke
Drops the dog-end
Seine hurts
A fish without a home
Orphan sobs
A warm window is too high above
Is there a heaven in it
Orphan weeps Seine's tears
Motherhood in need
A door in between
Two lovers' itchy hearts
9 pm 5 hundred yard
A date at The Seine's bank
A silver wedding in snow
Seine's miracle on show
Snow flakes fall fall in frenzy
Bury Norman's lonely sails
I am up and snow is down
Fly fly wings spread
Embrace dark embrace the dawn
Paramour's smile
Shy shy, Seine turns to be gone
Where is Paris
A garden for Cupid's nap
Seine leads the way
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Skeetr at 08:41 on 02 April 2004
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Welcome to WW, Avalive,
I do think that part members can edit their work. On this page, next to your screen name, under your title should be an "owner edit" button that allows you to re-craft your existing piece.
Best,
Smith
<Added>
Sorry -- that wasn't a critique meant to mean your piece needed recrafting :) -- just a response to your statement about not being able to edit your work.
Once again, welcome.
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Avalive at 08:57 on 02 April 2004
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Thanks Smith.
I tried before u told. I was told that:
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Edit Facility is not available to Part members.
(you may delete the work, but you will not be able to add a new piece).
To edit the work, and/or upload more work please become a full member.
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*Smile* Its okay,thanks anyways
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Skeetr at 09:24 on 02 April 2004
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Ah, "I see," said the spider to the fly... come into our web. Oh well, it's just an indication of how much WW wants you to be among us!
:)
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Avalive at 09:32 on 02 April 2004
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"Ain't this captured fly already on the web? If it tries to leave. It will lose its lil ala, then die." So,It will be around...
<Added>
< Await >
Embrace my sadness
Ends with A long goodbye
Tears after your disappering
Dripping on my dreaming
27 hours a day
None-sleeping
Perfumes uselss
Your absence
My loneliness
Flesh speechless
Dearest petals
Guardians across the oceans
Finest dew drops
Stars along the road
Embrace your promises
Start with a long way home
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roovacrag at 10:17 on 02 April 2004
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Avaline
Liked the second one as well.
Silver wedding in the snow so befitting.
Hope you become full member so we read more.
xx Alice
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Avalive at 02:10 on 08 April 2004
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<Mom's Tears>
Mom's tears, my sin
April the second is demon's feast
God's invited, alas
Divine Command picked me as a messenger
Hallelujah
On my knees
On my way
Be ready be honored
Be obeied be gone
Let mom go with you
Mom can protect you
My silence is a no
Sister's gentle hand
Place my favorite candy in the sack
Let Cindy go with you
Cindy can amuse you
My smile is a no
Far away,stands my father and his willow tree
Sky is red,Luna is wild
No rains no winds
Willow's shadow crys
On my knees, top of the Earth
Throat is broken for a sound
Shaking hands touch the ground
Part of it I become
For ever I'll stay
Everywhere around my town
Farewell is not to God
Only a damn long chant I can grant
I'm your kid,Your dearest Majesty
Pat on my back and Let me be gone
Out of mom's sight
Out of my pleassure ground
Mom's tears, my sin
Will I be return and sin be purged
Hallelujah
On my knees
Farewell
My holly ground
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