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SPRING HAIKU

by Beanie Baby 

Posted: 31 March 2004
Word Count: 104
Summary: Haiku is my most favourite poetry form and I am inspired by everything. I hope you enjoy these.
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On top of a bus,
overlooking fields and hills.
Nature's masterpiece.

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Three hours until dusk,
another day almost done.
Silver moon beckons.

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My world is at peace
as the sun settles beyond
our quiet garden.

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Reaching for the moon.
I'll never, ever give up.
Pen and poetry.

(for Steve)

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Where the moon's brightest,
there lies my ambitious dream.
Sleepy eye opens.

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Sunday afternoon.
I sit and watch the circus -
birds in the garden.

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(This one has too few syllables to qualify but it has the feel of haiku ...)

Glitterazi.
The celebrity's eyes
pierced by flashbulbs.

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igbit33 at 14:11 on 31 March 2004  Report this post
I liked them all, Beanie Baby. Particularly the third and sixth. Lovely.

Do you need the punctuation in the sixth? As without the second line could attach to either the first or third. Just a very small and personal thought. I enjoyed them.

The thing about nature is it just has so many 'moments' to enjoy - and to share it seems.

Ig.

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Oop, should have put a comma after without.
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Nell at 20:13 on 31 March 2004  Report this post
Hi Beanie Baby,

Did you realize there's 'moon' in four of the six? It's odd, because I do this too, almost unconsciously, then when I've written a few I find they're all related. Lovely moments, specially liked silver moon beckons, and sleepy eye opens, and the sharpness of the last one.

Silver moon beckons
our quiet garden
sleepy eye opens

Sorry, couldn't resist, hope you don't mind!

Nell.
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Beanie Baby at 22:47 on 06 April 2004  Report this post
Thank you Nell and Ig for your welcome comments about my spring haiku. Sorry it's taken me a while to respond - I've been in the process of changing jobs and it's very time consuming! Hopefully I'll be settled before too long then I can take up my pen again. In the meantime, Nell, thank you for your experiemntal little verse using lines from different haiku - clever idea and the effect was pretty impressive! And yes - I did know most were moon-related. They came from a booklet I am putting together entitled Reaching for the Moon which I'm hoping will be my next self-publishing venture. But I do occasionally find I have written several haiku on the same theme without realising it until afterward which I guess just shows how foccussed our minds are! And Ig - I do share your love of nature which I find forms the basis to about 85% of my haiku verses! Thanks again, y'all!
Best wishes always,
Beanie
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