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Leaving

by roovacrag

Posted: 29 March 2004
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Don't leave me
i need you
tears flowed
I love you.

I remember the words
so dear to my heart
remember the kiss
as we did part.

Picked up my flowers
you had given with love
i prayed to God
in the heaven above.

Heard you crying out
for my help
I cried as i left
I had to let go.

I would always love you
for the rest of my life
to stay would have killed
all the love that i have.

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word`s worth at 21:13 on 29 March 2004 Report this post

Alice,

I found this very moving. The dilemma of a person who still loves but has to leave before the love dies and turns into hate. Very raw emotion here:

Don't leave me
i need you
tears flowed
I love you.

That's really someone setting themselves up for terrible heartache, but willing to risk it as a last effort into making the person stay.

I also had a vision of someone standing over a grave. It may be - don't leave me - as in don't die and leave me. And the poem jumps from the living and the departed. The flowers that you gave me...flowers on a grave, perhaps?

It can be written about both things I think. Good poem, Alice.

Nahed

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joanie at 21:15 on 29 March 2004 Report this post

Alice......... 'Don't leave me' and 'I had to let you go' - the dilemma is really poignant. Lots of food for thought here.
joanie

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roovacrag at 05:56 on 30 March 2004 Report this post

Nahed you got it right.
Both relate first the living,the second the dying.
Painful.
xxAlice

Thank you joan,will make a lot think.
xx Alice

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igbit33 at 15:40 on 30 March 2004 Report this post

A powerful and moving poem, Alice. Very well written and still full of the emotion that penned it. Well done.

Iggy. xx

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