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MAD HATTERS

by roovacrag 

Posted: 11 March 2004
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like a mad hatters tea party
all gone to pot
everyone scatty
need to be shot.

Running around like a grey arse fly
saying "i'm late"
telling the time
white rabbit does this have to rhyme?

Cheshire cat grins
dormouse asleep
all is quiet
not even a peep.

Queen just screams
"chop off their heads,"
words all in reems
everything said.














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The Walrus at 18:55 on 11 March 2004  Report this post
Ha! Great! 'chop of their heads'! lol

A piece of mad brilliance.

Well done Stan.

The Walrus
xx
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olebut at 10:54 on 12 March 2004  Report this post
Alice
I like the grey arsed fly

yes good pace and some nice images

david x
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miffle at 11:16 on 12 March 2004  Report this post
Alice, reminds me of what a children's tea party has the potential to become (or adults for that matter!). I've always been fond of the queen so glad to see her making a cameo here! Loved 'words in reems' 'white rabbit does this have to rhyme?' - a mad-hatty poem. nikki ;-)

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also made me think of all the rabbits out there (White and of Pooh Bear fame) racing around - seemed a hint to them, 'Slow Down' !
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Fearless at 20:00 on 12 March 2004  Report this post
I'll send you some more marijuana for your cake baking activities Al.
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igbit33 at 20:48 on 12 March 2004  Report this post
Did someone mention Mary Jane?!

I wish people would slow down, take the time to look around.
Well said, Alice in wonderland.

Ig. xx
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roovacrag at 21:16 on 12 March 2004  Report this post
THANK YOU ALL.
Chrissie and David.
You both picked different lines.

Nikkie you chose the rabbits.

woz...forgot the baking

Iggy....Alice in wonderland,has been a nicname.

Thank you all.xxxxxxxxx Alice
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TheGodfather at 01:35 on 21 September 2004  Report this post
Alice,

Good rhythm in this one. The pace is quick. I liked that aspect. I enjoyed the lines 'everyone scatty / need to be shot' & 'Queen just screams / "chop off thier heads."' The rhyming works throughout, doesn't feel forced.

One small fix: 'thier' - spelling.

TheGodfather
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roovacrag at 12:31 on 21 September 2004  Report this post
Goddy many thank and I just fixed the typo. Thanks for remarking on it.

xx Alice
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