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Gaining a daughter

by joanie 

Posted: 10 March 2004
Word Count: 87
Summary: I find it so much easier to write in rhyme, but, having read lots of poetry on WW, I think I ought to try something different.


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I held him close,
Tiny being,
Totally dependent.

Sheer exhaustion,
Utter love,
Total commitment.

Broken nights,
Endless worry
Hidden by a smile.

First teeth, first steps,
Parties, exams.
Eighteenth birthday vomit.

Student, degree.
First job, his foot
On the property ladder.

Wedding day.
His happiness
Brighter than the sunshine.

I hold him close
Across the miles,
Keeping my distance.

A new woman
Comforts him now.
I step back a pace.

Their mutual love
Gives his life meaning.
And, because he lives for her........

I love her too.






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roovacrag at 22:10 on 10 March 2004  Report this post
This is good. I did one the daughter in law.
I find it a bit hard when its not rhyming.
This was full of love,
full of potential,
would make a good story as well.
Not managed it myself.
Well done.
xx Alice

Fearless at 13:32 on 11 March 2004  Report this post
Journey of a man seen through the eyes of a mother. Very touching.

Fearless

joanie at 19:50 on 20 November 2004  Report this post
Is this what it's all about? I wrote this for a specific reason back in March ..... my daughter-in-law was so delighted that she had the poem written out professionally and framed. It now takes pride of place in their home.

This, possibly above everything, has made me think about WHY we write!

I'm still thinking!

joanie

<Added>

I'm having a bit of a crisis re. my 'work' at the moment!!




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