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by libera 

Posted: 27 February 2004
Word Count: 58
Summary: Perfect combination of love
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Nothing, in Life, is more complete
Than when these loves, in time, shall meet.
A true rounded love, unlike any other,
Of family, friend, Holy Father and lover.
Not frowned upon by the Holy Trinity
This beautiful mutual love of purity.
Where hearts bodies and souls shall combine in one
And no true lover such harmony will shun.






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roovacrag at 17:13 on 27 February 2004  Report this post
This is a beautiful poem. Flows well and not over done.like how you put the holy father in as well,along side lover.
Felt like saying hail Mary.
Enjoyed this. well done.
xxAlice
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poemsgalore at 18:26 on 02 March 2004  Report this post
How lovely, an excellent piece of work. I wonder if it might be a little improved if the line:

"Where hearts bodies and souls shall combine in one"

were changed to:

"Where hearts, souls and bodies combine in one"

Just my suggestion, for what it's worth.
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libera at 13:24 on 03 March 2004  Report this post
thanks for comments. poemsgalore i like your version for the penultimate line. it's more succinct!
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