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Reveille

by crowspark 

Posted: 07 September 2024
Word Count: 46
Summary: For Kirsty's words challenge
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Reveille

Orange flashes catch curtains
disability bus reverses outside
Timmy stands beside his mummy
clutching his i-pad to his side
Eyes wide open bright like honey
two black holes that suck
worlds inside
but no words will ever
be spoken
his world
broken
never mind

 






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michwo at 22:56 on 07 September 2024  Report this post
A timely reminder that some disabilities like deaf and dumbness, mental handicap and autism have to be endured not only by those who have them but also by their carers, that some disabilities have to be put up with and tolerated rather than overcome. Not everyone can compete in the Paralympics.
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roger at 11:14 on 08 September 2024  Report this post
A proper poem that I can understand, Bill. Thank you smiley
 
And a very good point, Michael.
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FelixBenson at 15:36 on 09 September 2024  Report this post
Very interesting use of Reveille as the title. I loved how that was the beep and light of the bus as it arrives to collect Timmy.

These images and lines are lovely:

Eyes wide open bright like honey
two black holes that suck
worlds inside

I found the change of tone in the final line intriguing!
Excellent poem.
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crowspark at 16:24 on 09 September 2024  Report this post
Thank you Michael, Roger and Kirsty for reading and commenting.
 
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