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IRENE
Posted: 24 August 2024
Word Count: 76
Summary: My attempt at serious
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I occasionally think of Irene
Didn’t know her well
Suppose I do it out of duty
If I’m being honest, there’s no other reason
She was with us for eighty-six years
Never had many friends, if any, probably none
And I doubt anyone else ever recalls her
And surely someone ought to bring her to mind from time to time
After all, if not, what were those eighty-six years for?
So I occasionally think of Irene
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 michwo at 18:23 on 24 August 2024
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There's a big difference between the TONE of this poem and that of "Aftermath", Roger. When I read "Aftermath" I wondered if Hazel had threatened to leave you or something. It certainly read as if prompted by a close relationship with a woman in your life, whereas "Irene" seems to be about someone you were glad to see the back of... or is there an element of make-believe in both poems and I'm taking them too literally? When I wrote that "Aftermath" is 'too in people's faces' it was for two reasons: 1) I can't encourage you to use a Flash Poetry thread to gratuitously splash a whole poem like this and have comments on it on a particular page.take up even more room and 2) was this not, by virtue of its subject matter, an essentially PRIVATE poem? You've had Bill commenting on your tree poem, I know, and recommending you to post a link to it in the thread. The thread, by the way, is for titles of poems, NOT the whole thing, which can then be clicked on and found listed under Latest Work. Why isn't "Aftermath" listed under Latest Work in your case like "The pointy, mousy thing" and "IRENE"? I wish you'd tell Bazz that you want to join the Flash Poetry and the Flash Fiction groups and normalize your contributions. If you won't, you won't, of course. At the moment it strikes me that you won't come to us, we have to come to you. Can't you meet us halfway and stop being coy?
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roger at 19:33 on 24 August 2024
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Hi Michael,
Many thanks for the in-depth comment – it’s very much appreciated. Regarding ‘Aftermath and ‘Irene’, ‘Aftermath’ was what I imagined might be the thoughts of someone a few days after being dumped by a partner who was incredibly important to him/her. It’s pure fiction. ‘Irene’ was my thoughts of someone who died a few years ago aged eighty-six, having had a pretty miserable life. Irene did exist and I knew her for several decades. It saddened me that she was pretty much forgotten very quickly.
Regarding the rest, when I re-joined WW, I hinted at what my position is in my first post – ‘Introduction’. Having been strongly encouraged to join the groups, I went into more detail to a member via WW mail – I’m sorry, but I can’t remember who.
I don’t want to explain too much on an open forum, but what I will do is post on the two groups soon.
I promise you that it’s nothing to do with being coy 
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