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Gingerbread Walls

by Jojovits1 

Posted: 28 February 2021
Word Count: 42
Summary: Well this was much, much harder than I thought!

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Her walls were gingerbread.
Soft crumbs of pride
and powdered sugar.
Pretty and fragile.

And all invited inside
found sweetness and
treachory in her
sticky embrace.

They yearned escape
by moonlit, pebble paths
instead their eyes clouded
with dust and breadcrumbs.


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michwo at 09:36 on 01 March 2021  Report this post
Good creation of an atmosphere in this poem.
Even the witch herself is tempted by her surrundings and ultimately trapped in them.


A totally relevant and faithful take on the source and thought-provokingly written too. (For 'surrundings' read 'surroundings'!)

V`yonne at 14:02 on 01 March 2021  Report this post
It was a lot harder than I thought too! Mind you've done a stirling job on it! I particularly like

     sweetness and
treachory in her
sticky embrace

which is maybe at the essence of all fairy tales -- somebody always come to a sticky end. And in the longings there you gave us no happy ending. I'd be inclined to use that as the title. I like it.

crowspark at 17:04 on 02 March 2021  Report this post
Oooh spooky atmosphere!  Love that last stanza and how the crumbs and powdered sugar try to blind their escape along the moonlit, pebble paths!

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