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Pieces of meat

by ChrisB 

Posted: 22 February 2004
Word Count: 184
Summary: Has been a week or two of aaahhhhhhhhh !


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They are just junked up lazy ignorant self loathing peices of meat
Unloving and unforgiving pieces of meat
Digging away at each others blood
And each others hearts
Gorging out each others eyes
Why ? They don't see anyway
Not that which is real
Just a bunch of sadistic selfish cowardice peices of meat
Egotistical bigoted stupid silly unworthy weak pieces of meat
Sitting on their arses, doing fuck all
Talking behind peoples backs
Wackos, full of lies and deceipt
Why ? for pieces of meat
Blood sucking vampires
Where are your angel wings?
Havenít you just forgotten the god within
Fucking pieces meat fucking pieces of meat
Parasites feeding on pieces of meat
Dignity is as much as a penny worth of mint leaves
Nothingness is a key to your door
You forgotten it is everything
Forgotten who you all are
I feel sorry for you
But that is the challenge for me
To go beyond this duality
Transcend time and reach eternity,
Iím going home now
Iím on my way and nothing gonna stop me
Certainly not these pieces of fucking meat.







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Dee at 19:15 on 22 February 2004  Report this post
Blimey Chris! You have had a bad week, havenít you.

I recognise that Friday afternoon feeling but, whatever caused it, this is a very powerful and disturbing piece of writing.

I like it a lot.

Dee.


roovacrag at 19:59 on 22 February 2004  Report this post
Wow....one angry poem,done to a turn.Well chosen words can feel the power in it.
Well done i liked it.xxAlice

Fearless at 20:11 on 22 February 2004  Report this post
Aaah, the sweet waters of the River Invective flow on. Liked it.

Fearless

miffle at 10:21 on 23 February 2004  Report this post
'where are your angel wings?' and 'penny worth of mint leaves' stood out in this poem for me in their contrast to the swirling expletives around them. Hope you got this off your chest!? miffle ;-)

NB Pretty sure you need apostrophes after 'eachothers' - think it's 'eachothers' blood' 'eachothers' hearts' 'eachothers' eyes' (?)

engldolph at 13:05 on 29 March 2004  Report this post
hi Chris
Yes, liked the "meat" image a lot..reminded my of images from the artist Francis Bacon..
Some brilliant lines:

- They are just junked up lazy ignorant self
- Unloving and unforgiving pieces of meat

- Why ? for pieces of meat
- Where are your angel wings?
- Dignity is as much as a penny worth of mint leaves
- Certainly not these pieces of fucking meat

Also some lines that don't add and could go (but them I'm an editor by nature!)
And, personal opinion, I don't think the "fuck" word is necessary...except maybe in last line..

Hope your next 2 weeks are more soaring..
Mike


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