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Pendulum of rain

by Practicer 

Posted: 12 October 2019
Word Count: 78
Summary: Written for the flash poetry challenge using the words, pendulum, comfort, survival, flower, porous, and poppy.
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The pendulum of rain 
 sounds  a bit poppy 
it is as  strong as a  pot  of drunk  ground coffee 
draining the porous that makes my tongue sticky 
The survival through sedation 
from the cold comfort of instant percolation 
Tuning into that flower power 
I drop those pain relief tablets 
To get my hung up over 
 the rest of my day
is the like the resistance of air 
from the pivot of my arms rising up off the sofa






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V`yonne at 15:06 on 12 October 2019  Report this post
Cheers! You worked all the words in too.

the pivot of my arms rising up off the sofa

such an effort! And I really liked

I drop those pain relief tablets 
To get my hung up over 
 the rest of my day

I think I dubbed it Pendulum of Pain by mistake before I read it?! Maybe not far from the mark.
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Practicer at 15:32 on 12 October 2019  Report this post
Thank you for your comments. 
I am glad that  I gave the challenge a try.
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V`yonne at 18:20 on 12 October 2019  Report this post
You always get something out of it -- an idea, a line, a new direction -- plus it's fun.
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crowspark at 09:50 on 13 October 2019  Report this post
I like the complexity of your poem.
Enjoyed:

To get my hung up over 
 the rest of my day

So does poppy refer to the sound of rain compared with teh popping of a coffee perculator?
Love the line

is the like the resistance of air 

in any context.

Bill
 
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Practicer at 10:03 on 13 October 2019  Report this post
I was looking  looking through the sitting room window and it was heavily raining. I had a bit of a headache. I have a wall clock with a pendulum.  I tried coming up with similies, whilst letting paracetemol cure the headache.

Thank you for the feedback.
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FelixBenson at 16:37 on 18 October 2019  Report this post
Very intriguing and interestesting poem to untangle. Some very striking images here, I like the line Oonah mentioned too and 'from the cold comfort of instant percolation' ....and especially I love all those sounds, echoing the rain!

Great entry!
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