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Donít Sign Me Up

by Mickey 

Posted: 05 October 2018
Word Count: 135
Summary: An imagined letter from Robert Edwin Peary to his pushy mother


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I don’t want to go to the North Pole Mum
so don’t sign me up for the trip.
There’s holes in me mittens,
the cat’s just had kittens,
and the air right up there has a nip.
 
The dog’s caught a cold and gone Husky
so let’s leave the sled in the shed.
I don’t want froze toes
like those poor Eskimos
and I’m getting a cold in me head.
 
I think I’m in line for a rest Mum
so I’m going to bed for a kip.
Why not let some other
set out to discover
the route to the Northernmost tip?
 
I know that you’re anxious I make it
and not to obscurity slip,
but it’s covered with snow
and I don’t want to go -
so don’t sign me up for the trip.






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James Graham at 19:54 on 06 October 2018  Report this post
Another witty, quirky idea that makes an entertaining poem. I like the way the lad seems to be running out of excuses at the end:
 
it’s covered with snow
and I don’t want to go
 
Readers might give a muffled groan at ‘gone Husky’ but the rest is as inventive as usual, e.g.
 
There’s holes in me mittens,
the cat’s just had kittens
 
let’s leave the sled in the shed
 
It seems Peary fancied Inuit girls – left two children in the frozen North. Did his Mum know? There’s a poem in that.
 
Nothing wrong with this new poem, but it’s a pity you took down ‘Wny Insects Don’t Play Football’ so soon, before other members got a chance to read it. I’m thinking of putting one of my regular notices in Flash, to get them to come over and look at the Poetry Group for a change. If ‘Insects’ was there more readers could enjoy it.
 
James.
 

Mickey at 20:39 on 06 October 2018  Report this post
Thanks James,
I’m never sure how long to wait for comments so, if I’ve got another ready, I’ll post it after a couple of days. I was hoping for more response to ‘Fairy Rings’ rather than the insect one actually (I re-formatted it and hoped for others’ opinions on the new ‘shape ‘). Glad you liked this one though. It amused me to think of a national hero having been pushed into ‘stardom’ by his mum!

James Graham at 14:17 on 07 October 2018  Report this post
Hi Mike – If you want to re-post ‘Fairy Rings’ that’s fine. I will put that notice in Flash sometime today. People who are members of both poetry groups tend to stick with Flash and forget about Poetry, so I’m going to ask them to come over and do some comments. It’s usually best to leave a poem for three days.

James.

V`yonne at 17:31 on 07 October 2018  Report this post
I liked the husky joke laugh and I like the rest too except for my hatred of contorted syntax which leads me to wish you would revise one line...

and not to obscurity slip,

and I just can think how to replace that bit if I do, I'll let you know.

It's fun and it could make the Canzonet with that little revision!


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