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Smells like October

by Jojovits1 

Posted: 29 August 2018
Word Count: 115
Summary: October, to me, has a smell. I can recognise it anywhere (and it doesn't need to be October to smell it). It heralds the end of summer and the begining of autumn. It reminds me that Halloween is round the corner. I love the smell and it makes me not miss summer :-)


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Fighting in the office
over air con or
whispers of breath
from the open window.
You smell the charcoal
and laughter.
 
Weekends of picnics
and BBQs.
Prosecco and “Planet Rock”.
Book and Scotch egg
in either hand.
 
Early evening
beer gardens.
Head tilted upwards
smiling at the sun
who clothes you in her
suffocating breath.
 
Without a tremor
you feel the change.
 
The need
for closed shoes.
Your long discarded
cardigan is again
office attire.
The beer garden
not as comfortable
in the cloud.
 
Midnight duvet fights
against sleep have
been won.  Finally.
 
It smells like October.
 
Sun still playing with
the ends of your hair
and the kiss of frost
on your fingers.
 






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V`yonne at 23:21 on 29 August 2018  Report this post
Ah yes! I see it and feel it too.

The need
for closed shoes.
Your long discarded
cardigan. 

I would end that sequence there for universiality.

“Planet Rock”. doesn't mean anything to me -- but that'll just be me I suppose.

Cliff Hanger at 08:48 on 30 August 2018  Report this post
Hi Jo

Really like the premise of this because I agree about the smell of changingseasons or even weather. I always know when its going to snow because the air has a certain smell. The closed shoes is genius and I think it should be obligatory to have a book in one hand and a Scotch egg in the other! 

Great poem and I really enjoyed reading it.

Jane

Thomas Norman at 18:59 on 30 August 2018  Report this post
Hi Jo,

This is brilliant! I love the very naturalness of the writing and the ideas you have put into it. Like Oonah and Jane I salute the shoes and cardigan lines as totally inspired. That's not to denigrate the rest, it's wonderful to read an absolute delight.

Thomas.

V`yonne at 23:32 on 30 August 2018  Report this post
and I had to eat a Scotch egg today!! 

Jojovits1 at 19:41 on 31 August 2018  Report this post
Haha, Oonah!  Hope you enjoyed it wink.  I was probably too literal.  There's a lovely little park round the corner and my husband and I have spent a few gorgeous days this summer with a picnic, a bottle of prosecco, the usual picnic fodder (spent so much time baking in the morning, the prosecco was welcome!) and the radio (Planet Rock is a station).

its one of those places we walk through a lot but until now have never spent that much time in.  It's been a little gem this year smiley.

V`yonne at 08:31 on 01 September 2018  Report this post
Scotch egg was glorious!!! yes 
radio! Gaga googoo -- haven't listened to radio in years now...

and now I bought a new cardy too -- you appear to be controlling my mind. Stop it at once or suggest I win the lottery laugh

joanie at 10:12 on 02 September 2018  Report this post
Jo, I do like this!  There are so many things I can relate to.  I particularly love

Early evening
beer gardens.
Head tilted upwards
smiling at the sun
who clothes you in her
suffocating breath.

The contrasts in tone and pace throughout make it really enjoyable to read aloud.  Lovely response!

Joan

FelixBenson at 20:11 on 02 September 2018  Report this post

Your long discarded
cardigan is again
office attire.

It's back! Mine too! I know exactly what this smell is. The woodsmoke mixed with the quality of the air, the emall of cold, a bit of dampness to mix with the dry smoke. Maybe a bit of wet leaf and conker! It's like a witches brew and it does make you feel differently, a sort of excitement that the cool air is coming. Wooly clothes, boots and skirts.
So many evocative impressions here. Wonderful stuff.

Jojovits1 at 20:14 on 02 September 2018  Report this post
Spot on! 😁


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