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Jersey Boys
Posted: 30 August 2017 Word Count: 124 Summary: A homage presented in response to Jennifer’s challenge 389
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Everyone loved Paul and John, and most the hairy Stones, the ‘60s peace protestors drooled at Dylan’s monotone. But me? - I always stood apart my mates thought me doolally - the ‘sound’ that stopped my teenage heart, was that of Frankie Valli. No passing craze, from Vee-Jay days I’ve loved the Seasons’ sound, their high falsetto harmonies I’ve listened to spell-bound. I watched them grow, Bob Gaudio, Nick Massi, Tom DeVito. And their LP’s in plastic sleeves I’ve laid down like good vino! (Sherry….of course!)
Line 7 Earliest recordings were credited The Four Seasons - featuring the ‘sound’ of Frankie Valli Line 10 Vee-Jay was The Four Seasons’ first record label Line 18 ‘Sherry’ was the title of their first Number 1 hit
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joanie at 20:57 on 30 August 2017
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Hi Mike. I am not involved in the challenges yet, really, because I am breaking myself in gradually. This is great, as usual, but I can't help thinking that I would have stopped it after line 9. It feels like a limerick almost, then. After that, I do think that it is weaker; the metre is forced, somehow, especially the last four lines. I do understand, however, that you want to give some details - names, albums, etc.
Have you been to the musical? I am not really a musical fan, but I am very tempted!
Great read, again.
joanie
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Thomas Norman at 12:41 on 02 September 2017
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Hello Mike,
This really brings the memories flooding back! I love how you have so cleverly woven the names into the poem.
All very familiar to me( the Stones were always my favourite) Reading this I can hear in my head the "Seasons" special sound.
I recall seeing them when they were hardly known; playing at a dance hall if I recall!
I have a couple of suggestions.
L3. better would be to use "the" rather than "and" again right below the one in L2,
I agree to a degree with Joanie, I think some of the rhymes are there for the sake of rhyme. The internal rhymes L1, L10, L14, L16. And the alliterations are more than enough. To overdo is to make it farcical. The poem is good as does not deserve that accolade! I actually like those final lines and feel they give the poem a sense of place and time.
Great work from you as ever Mike!
Thomas.
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V`yonne at 23:15 on 02 September 2017
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It's fun. I wasn't much into any music but classical as a teen, I kind of liked The Monkees but I don't recall much of the other stuff. Light hearted poems can take rhyme, I think and this one is lighthearted so it worked okay for me.
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Mickey at 09:22 on 03 September 2017
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Hi Joanie, Thomas, and Oonah
Thank you all for your comments. I must confess that this is a very old piece written, as I said in the summary, as a homage to my all-time favourite group. I started listening to them in about 1964 when I first heard 'Dawn' and didn't stop for the next forty years! I have a collection of over thirty albums but don't seem to listen to light music much anymore. Like Oonah, i now prefer classical (poor old sod!). I've never seen the stage show, Joanie, because I didn't want to burst my teenage bubble (all that nasty Mafia stuff doesn't fit the image I have of them!) Thomas, you're right about the 'and' opening line 3 (I'll change it) As this was a recycled piece, I've now just posted an original for Jennifer's challenge and hope that I've not missed the deadline. Thanks again all,
Mike
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V`yonne at 10:48 on 03 September 2017
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Oi! Who are you calling a 'poor auld sod?' I went to A Pink Floyd gig in Wembley with my husband -- too loud. And then of course there was the 'Famous Dave's' in Minneapolis (see poem in my work) but I saw Leonard Cohen twice and that was a joy!
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