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Apreeshythanks
Posted: 25 August 2017
Word Count: 70
Summary: Inspired by the late 'Professor' Stanley Unwin
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U likey reedy versicrap?
Well earie swan 4U
to fanky fordy kyndiwords
for uffa stuffa do.
Cos froody inter nettiweb
I foundy buncha wordimates
who posty notes on fings I sed
(opini-views I preeshy ate)
I ritey rhymy rubbi-shpeek
for many yonky years
an dizzy swan I dunnis week
for your professhy ears.
I offa my apreeshythanks
for cawley mia friend –
I runny outta silliwords
so ere depoem ends!
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 James Graham at 19:34 on 26 August 2017
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Hi Mike - I was about to comment on your Dyson poem when it disappeared! You turn out one masterpiece after another, and they luminesce briefly and then move on,
Like the Borealis race
That flit ere you can point their place
Gone before you can say Heath Robinson. (See my late comment on the Dyson poem, where this reference will be elucidated.)
James.
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 V`yonne at 13:35 on 27 August 2017
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thispoemsheis
sowondaffu
anfuowondatoo
aliketherference
totwofacefolk
areelydo
athinkumaybgenius
amongpoetythings
anwouldbegladto
flyurpoemfor
inthelinnetswings
It's brilliant!!
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V`yonne at 13:38 on 27 August 2017
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I've been issueing backhanders too  on Facebook heehee
http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/33302.asp
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James Graham at 16:49 on 27 August 2017
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On behalf of all our wordimates in WW may I say we greatly preeshy ate what you call your ‘rhymy rubbi-shpeek’. Not only this one - all of it. Out of curiosity I checked out some of the works of Stanley Unwin, particularly the classic tale ‘Goldyloppers and the Three Bearloaders’, which begins: ‘Goldyloppers trittly-how in the early mordy, and she falolloped down the steps’. Your Unwinese seems a little bit different, but in what way it’s different I haven’t a clue. It’s clever, that’s for sure.
I have my usual reservations about what’s implied by ‘rubbi-shpeek’ and ‘silliwords’. I keep trying to convince you that your poems are not silly. I don’t think you really believe they are anyway. Comic verse is a genre and some of yours are up there with the best. I’ve already mentioned Spike Milligan – you can find some of his poems on Poem Hunter. Your best compares quite well with his best. (Though I have to say Spike did sometimes write stuff that really is silly.) Call your poems ‘larkish whimsiverse’ or something similar, but not silly! To quote Oonah, athinkumaybgenius.
James.
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 Mickey at 17:40 on 27 August 2017
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Thank you all so much. You're probably right James, that within the genre of comic verse, I think my poems can hold their own. It's more that I think comic verse in itself is somehow of less importance. I'm glad you liked this one though as I was worried you might consider it a bit of self-indulgent nonsense
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 joanie at 20:50 on 27 August 2017
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I did a challenge on here back in 2004(!) about Spike Milligan. It is called Crocodile Fears if you want to have a look.
Joan
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V`yonne at 23:23 on 27 August 2017
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self-indulgent nonsense
is what I think this is about
= the poetry slam mentallity
and it fits! in the best sense of irony.
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 Thomas Norman at 19:26 on 28 August 2017
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Mike all I can say is I wish I could writ half as good!
Quite brilliant. Have you read any of John Lennon's stuff? Not invented words but very funny.
Thomas.
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Mickey at 14:10 on 30 August 2017
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Hello Joanie
I checked out your Spike Milligan poem ‘Crocodile Fears’ which I thought was wonderful. I particularly liked the word ‘pertwunkling’ and ‘a quarter past the moon’. I wonder if you were responding to the same challenge as I was, as the piece below was written about the same time?
If I were neither up or down
or left or right or middle,
I’d have to borrow half a crown
and learn to play the fiddle.
If I were neither black or white
but blue and pink and green,
you’d have to put me out at night
and sing ‘God Save the Queen’.
If I had knees of cottage cheese
and rhubarb arms and legs,
I’d have to walk to South Belize
and live on ostrich eggs.
If I were neither thin or fat
or oversized or small,
you’d have to feed me to the cat
and send me back to school.
I was interested in the fact that several of your admirers suggested a sub-group for ‘nonsense’ and/or ‘childrens’ poetry. That would be great as I’m sure we all write loads of short children’s poems that are not worth wasting a full posting on - perhaps we could upload two or three at a time?
Returning to ‘Crocodile Fears’, the subject matter (being eaten by a crocodile) is similar to one of mine satirising how people seem oblivious to their surroundings when on mobile phones. It was a supposed such call between a zookeeper and his girlfriend whilst an alligator was eating his leg. We seem to be on the same wavelengths (do they have ‘wavelengths’ any more?)
Thanks again for commenting and alerting me to your Spike piece
Mike
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joanie at 14:45 on 30 August 2017
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Brilliant, Mike! Yes, it could well have been the same challenge. I enjoyed yours very much - and I enjoyed writing mine, too! Good fun, aren't they? Your third verse is brilliant, because it is just so ridiulous and the metre is perfect! all the metre is perfect, in fact. I am a great believer that some poems have to be read aloud, (even if alone!), which is exactly why the children's ones are great for that. In my experience, little ones adore rhyme and can very soon copy and learn it. Yes, I'm sure there are still wavelengths, even in poetry! There's a poem in there, I think!
Thanks again.
joanie
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