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Slum Clearance

by Mickey 

Posted: 18 June 2017
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Terraced houses, terraced lives,
terraced husbands, terraced wives,
terraced kids, and dogs and cats,
all cleared away for high-rise flats.
 
Build ‘em cheap and stack ‘em high.
Communities that touch the sky.
“This is where we’ll house the dregs
(don’t worry ‘bout the Building Regs)”
 
Floor on floor of cattle pens,
their residents like battery hens,
with lonely, panoramic views
but nobody to share their news.
 
Isolated in the skies,
all the lifts are vandalised.
Rubbish stacks up in the halls,
grafitti covers all the walls.
 
Used syringes on the stairs,
their Social Landlord couldn’t care.
“Just tart ‘em up and make ‘em pretty,
their ugliness can’t mar The City”
 
Twenty floors of fractured lives,
fractured husbands, fractured wives
fractured kids, no dogs or cats.
Nowhere to play in high-rise flats.



Version 2

Slum Clearance
 
Terraced houses, terraced lives,
terraced husbands, terraced wives,
terraced kids, and dogs and cats,
all cleared away for high-rise flats.
 
A stark, Post-Modern Brutalism
became the sixties’ future vision.
Lives sacrificed on drawing boards,
by local civic overlords.
 
Their slick ‘impressions’ of the dream
in Crimson Lake and Hooker’s Green
showed cycle paths and planting schemes
and lots of healthy public greens.
 
But planned ‘Utopia’ can’t compete,
the lost, lamented terraced street
where people lived and loved and died,
with friends and family by their side.
 
Build ‘em cheap and stack ‘em high.
Communities that touch the sky.
“This is where we’ll house the dregs
(don’t worry ‘bout the Building Regs.
 
And now we’ve got the planning sorted
the ‘open space’ can be aborted”)
With all the ‘Homes for Heroes’ razed,
the modern ‘homes’ were double glazed!
 
Floor on floor of cattle pens,
their residents like battery hens,
with lonely, panoramic views
but nobody to share their news.
 
Isolated in the skies,
all the lifts now vandalised.
Rubbish stacks up in the halls,
grafitti covers all the walls.
 
Used syringes on the stairs,
their Social Landlord couldn’t care.
“Just tart ‘em up and make ‘em pretty,
their ugliness can’t mar The City”
 
Twenty floors of fractured lives,
fractured husbands, fractured wives
fractured kids, no dogs or cats.
Nowhere to play in high-rise flats.



Version 3

Slum Clearance
 
Terraced houses, terraced lives,
terraced husbands, terraced wives,
terraced kids, and dogs and cats,
all cleared away for high-rise flats.
 
A stark, Post-Modern Brutalism
became the sixties’ future vision.
Lives sacrificed on drawing boards,
by their architectural overlords,
 
whose slick ‘impressions’ of the dream
in Crimson Lake and Hooker’s Green
showed cycle paths and planting schemes
and lots of healthy public greens.
 
But planned ‘Utopia’ can’t compete
with lost, lamented terraced streets
where people lived and loved and died,
their friends and family by their side.
 
Build ‘em cheap and stack ‘em high.
Communities that touch the sky.
With all the ‘Homes for Heroes’ razed,
the modern ‘homes’ were double glazed!
 
“This is where we’ll house the dregs
(don’t worry ‘bout the Building Regs -
and now we’ve got the planning sorted
the ‘open space’ can be aborted)”
 
Floor on floor of cattle pens,
their residents like battery hens,
with lonely, panoramic views
but nobody to share their news.
 
Isolated in the skies,
all the lifts now vandalised.
Rubbish stacks up in the halls,
grafitti covers all the walls.
 
Used syringes on the stairs,
their Social Landlord couldn’t care.
“Just tart ‘em up and make ‘em pretty,
their ugliness can’t mar The City”
 
Twenty floors of fractured lives,
fractured husbands, fractured wives
fractured kids, no dogs or cats.
Nowhere to play in high-rise flats.
 






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LA at 23:56 on 18 June 2017  Report this post
This is bang on. crying

Lesley

nickb at 09:40 on 23 June 2017  Report this post
Hi Mike,

as Lesley says this is bang on, a very valid response to the recent appalling disaster.  I have no doubt that more will come out in the wash around how corners have been cut to save money on these flats.  I like the way you have juxtaposed the last stanza with the first.  "Fractured" is a great way of describing the effect of living in high rises, where people are cut off from each other and the world around them.

“Just tart ‘em up and make ‘em pretty,
their ugliness can’t mar The City”

These are very telling lines, particularly in light of the wealth in somewhere like Kensignton and Chelsea.  It reflects on the power of money and greed, and the total lack of empathy that goes with it.

A very relevant poem for today, great stuff.

Nick



Mickey at 13:26 on 23 June 2017  Report this post
Although the recent tragedy inspired me to write this, it is not intended to be about Grenfell in particular. I would not wish to imply any shortcomings on residents who clearly have a great respect for each other and their community. Neither is it intended as a specific criticism of the way in which these particular people have been ignored. It is rather a general comment on the inhumanity of this legacy of 1960s ideologogy. I was trying to compare the 'terraced' lives of a traditional horizontal community with the soulless 'fractured' lives imposed upon them by enforced high-rise vertical living. 

James Graham at 20:08 on 23 June 2017  Report this post
Hello Mike – The first thing that hit me was the title. Sometimes poem titles are added mainly because a poem ought to have a title, but yours has a starring role. The irony is sharp as a razor: ‘slum clearance’ means getting rid of slums and replacing them with other slums, in a different shape. The poem’s message was relevant long before the Grenfell Tower disaster, but of course it takes on new significance now.
 
The form is actually very suitable for making satirical points. Rhyming couplets especially work well:
 
This is where we’ll house the dregs
(don’t worry ‘bout the Building Regs)
 
The rhyme makes the point. Sub-standard housing is good enough for sub-standard humanity.
 
The poem’s full of good lines, but I must mention one in particular.
 
with lonely, panoramic views
 
‘Panoramic views’ is usually a phrase with good connotations. They’re what you get as a reward for climbing a mountain. They can be ‘breathtaking’ into the bargain. More apposite to this poem, they are sometimes included in marketing descriptions of up-market seaside or country houses. Your addition of ‘lonely’ puts high-rise flats in perspective – loneliness makes the view from the top depressing and unsettling.
 
I feel the poem would benefit from having a little more, another stanza perhaps, saying something about the community life of the old terraced streets. The housing was poor, but at least the street and the back courts were meeting places. Children could play, neighbours could gossip. People could go along and call on a neighbour who had had a loss in the family or if someone was ill. There wasn’t much of a view but the old streets were not ‘lonely’. I know you already have ‘no dogs or cats’ and ‘Nowhere to play’ in the last stanza, but maybe a little more about the old life? A new stanza could end by saying that the old neighbourliness was also ‘cleared away for high-rise flats’. Maybe this is not essential, but it might add a little to the poem’s message.
 
I like this a lot – it’s very strong and very much to the point.
 
James.

Mickey at 20:23 on 23 June 2017  Report this post
Thanks Lesley, Nick, and James.  Apropos James's comment, I did actually have another stanza lined up but thought it might have been overmilking it a bit (and stopping where I did enabled the reflection of the first and last verses)  For what its worth, the last bit was going to be:

Post-war playgrounds wouldn't do.
The 'Homes for Heroes' flattened too
and stark, 'post-modern brutalism'
became the sixties' future vision.
But planned 'Utopia' can't compete
the lost, lamented, terraced street.

I seem to always end my poems with an unequal final stanza (in this case it would have been 6 lines instead of 4) but in my head, it always seems to make the closing point stand out better.  Any thoughts?

Mickey at 21:39 on 23 June 2017  Report this post
Following James's suggestion, i have just posted a revised version with four extra verses.

LA at 23:47 on 23 June 2017  Report this post
Mike,

I loved Version 1 but think Version 2 is so much better with its contrast between the old and new housing. Superb rhyming too. Best poem I've read in ages. smiley
There's something about the rhythm that reminds me of Betjeman - one of my faves.

Lesley

Mickey at 09:14 on 24 June 2017  Report this post
Wow, thank you Lesley. To be compared with Betjeman!  He is my all time favourite, so your praise could not be higher!

Cliff Hanger at 10:09 on 24 June 2017  Report this post
Great poem.

My only response would be a personal one along the lines of you need to be careful about having an over- romanticised view of how things were in the old days. The notion of basic but decent housing for all was a good one and not something that killed off communities. They also were not slums at the time by any manner of means. You're right that they were no utopia either but it was the sell-off and push toward 'aspiration' along with lack of proper public funding that has turned them back into slums.

The bits that really work for me are where you highlight that road toward the Grenfell tragedy. I don't think you can take the associations with that incident out of your piece so I would actually make it more directly about that if it were mine but that would make it an entirely different poem.

I'm sure lots of readers will chime with your views of the past, though.

Jane

 

Cliff Hanger at 14:57 on 24 June 2017  Report this post
I should have added Mickey that this is a really well written poem with an accomplished use of rhyming. Regardless of my reservations about the accepted narrative about what has made public services fail (forgive me, I've been fighting a lot of entrenched battle of my own this week on that front so I probably took it out on your poem a bit) it would definitely find a published home somewhere.

It's good to see a new poem from you in the forum.

Jane

James Graham at 20:19 on 24 June 2017  Report this post
Hi Mike – I like your new verses, maybe with one exception. See below. You make new points that are just as telling, especially in the second verse on Brutalism and the planners’ failure of empathy and imagination. This line is as good as any in the poem:
 
Lives sacrificed on drawing boards
 
I sense a real anger in this verse – well justified too.
 
The fourth verse, on ‘the lost, lamented terraced street’, is a good one too, and your glance back to life in the terraces does avoid sentimentality:
 
where people lived and loved and died,
with friends and family by their side
 
Well, it doesn’t talk about the down side – there would be vicious rows between neighbours sometimes, and drunkenness, and domestic violence – but what those two lines say is still true.
 
The one verse I think you could leave out is ‘And now we’ve got the planning sorted…’ I don’t see that it hangs together very well – the second couplet doesn’t seem to follow from the first. And it’s true double glazing doesn’t make up for the loneliness and loss of community, but the rest of the poem already makes that kind of point very well, especially ‘Just tart ‘em up and make ‘em pretty’. Also, St 7 really should follow St 5 - ‘don’t worry ‘bout the Building Regs…Floor on floor of cattle pens’ is the natural sequence.
 
One more small thing: you could add ‘with’ in these lines, to make sure the grammar is correct (and the meaning is clear):
 
But planned ‘Utopia’ can’t compete
with the lost, lamented terraced street
 
(No comma after ‘compete’.) Adding the little word doesn’t really disturb the rhythm.
 
We need more poems like this. It reminds me of the old ‘broadsides’ that used to be circulated,  exposing the follies of politicians of the day. Recently, on the Radio 4 ‘Dead Ringers’ show, I think it was impressionist Jan Ravens who spoke in Theresa May’s voice: ‘The time has come to say Sorry. You, the British electorate, should say Sorry. You didn’t vote the way you were told to vote!’ Mrs May, a.k.a. Maggie May, deserves a broadside.
 
James.

Mickey at 20:17 on 25 June 2017  Report this post
Hi Jane and James,
 
Thank you both for your kind comments on this piece.
 
First of all, I would like to reiterate that this is not about Grenfell, but is rather a comment on the psychological desirability of council tower blocks generally.  I do not want to add anything to that discussion out of respect to those involved.
 
James, I have taken on board your last comments and posted a second revision which I hope has now pulled the previously disparate trains of thought together in a more logical sequence?      
 
Jane, I’m not sure whether you are coming at this as a fellow architect defending the post-WW1 ‘Homes for Heroes’ and the concept of tower block living which replaced them, or from the perspective of the local authorities who are now facing the flak over last week’s tragedy?
 
Certainly the former terraced housing of the ‘20s was not of the highest constructional standards as so many were required and erected so quickly.  They did, however, inculcate a sense of community with their front and rear gardens, privet hedges, and space for self-sufficient vegetable patches which could never be recaptured in high-rise flats.
 
I don’t believe that the same sense of ‘belonging’ can ever attach to a high-rise flat (even multi-million pound private units) than is inherent in a terraced two-up-two-down, and this will inevitably lead to disenchantment from the residents who will feel more like prisoners than stakeholders in their own homes.


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