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The rainbow running through my head
Posted: 04 February 2004
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The rainbow
running through my head
leads to a land
of tootie-frootie
sherbet fizz.
Candy-striped hope and happiness
wait for me there,
hand-in-hand with the possibilities
I passed by
in past daydreams.
The rainbow running
through my head
is a sugar-coated tour-guide
to tomorrow.
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 Fearless at 10:38 on 04 February 2004
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I like this, reminding me of hope, wonder, 'The Magic Roundabout', and the lyrics from 'Strawberry Letter 23' by Shuggie Otis:
"All through the morning rain I gaze
The sun doesn’t shine,
Rainbows and waterfalls run
Through my mind.
In the garden I see
West purple shower bells and tea,
Orange birds and river cousins
Dressed in green.
Pretty music I hear
So happy and loud,
Blue flower echo from
A cherry cloud.
Feel sunshine sparkle pink and blue,
Playgrounds will laugh if you
Try to ask "Is it cool?"
Write on,
Fearless
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Bobo at 10:47 on 04 February 2004
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Woz - a few lines inspired by my Weemee and the fact I've taken too many drugs for 1 my age!...glad you liked it!
Shuggie's words 'resonate'...
BoBo x
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igbit33 at 17:10 on 04 February 2004
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I particularly like the way this is broken up, keeping the second part short and concise work really well. Perhaps it's my wayward nature that draws me to it!
H. xx
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igbit33 at 17:13 on 04 February 2004
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Forgot to mention, I like the the sujested rhyme of 'fizz' and 'happiness'. Rather draws the attention and makes the following line more powerfull.
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Bobo at 18:46 on 04 February 2004
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Cheers Iggy. Here's hoping your tomorrows are all sugar-coated also...
BoBo x
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