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Breakfast Suicide

by John G.Hall 

Posted: 30 January 2004
Word Count: 42
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Breakfast Suicide

A cold morning kiss
colours my glass
makes the day
a guess,

the fire makes me
a promise it keeps
my toast is pink
and buttered
with sweat,

I turn it over
and decide
to burn it
black.



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miffle at 11:46 on 30 January 2004  Report this post
Loved this short cutting poem John so beautifully distilled. Felt the weight of the 'the fire makes a promise it keeps'... Can feel the tension. Hope incinerating the toast helped ;-) Only one thing - unsure of imagery in 'colours my glass' (?); metaphorical to me i.e. crystal ball clouding over which conjures ideas of prophesy and second sight linking to 'guess'... nikki ;-)
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roovacrag at 12:19 on 30 January 2004  Report this post
Burn the toast and the fire alarms go off.
Good one made me smile.Breakfast id always suicide when in league with a hangover.xxxxxxAlice
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dr_mandrill at 15:21 on 30 January 2004  Report this post
Sleepy, and kind of sexy.

I like it.


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