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Shoulders not broad enough

by Bobo 

Posted: 28 January 2004
Word Count: 72
Summary: Something of a rambling...


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Can't.
Do.
It.

Don't feel able.

This chance -
it scares me.

What if I should fall?
What if I should fail?

All hopes
pinned on me -
too-heavy adornments.

Accessorised by expectation.

What if...?
What if...?
What if...?

Bombarded by platitudes
of supposed encouragement.

Not helping, you know!

Sign my release papers -
at least give me that,
a get-out clause.

If the tables were turned
I wouldn't pressure you so.






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olebut at 10:23 on 28 January 2004  Report this post
I love experimentation especially when it works and this does in my view

take care

david x

roovacrag at 12:07 on 28 January 2004  Report this post
Hey this is different.Well done. we all ramble do it often.We all take chances its life.xxxxxxxxx Alice

Fearless at 18:01 on 28 January 2004  Report this post
I liked this. Swaying amidst the winds of expectation, perched precariously atop your pedestal (ever noticed those banana republic generals, with so many medals and decorations that they're weighed down on one side?).

The format allows a wide interpretation...many scenes, sounds (clocks, questions, tick-tock, tick-tock, hurry up). The last two lines, the common disclaimer.

Nice one, write on.

Fearless

<Added>

It matters not if its a rambling - its expression.

Bobo at 19:00 on 28 January 2004  Report this post
David/Alice/Woz - cheers. Thought I'd play around a bit with format - wanted to convey the panic-attack induced by others' expectations. Glad you all approve!

BoBo x

The Walrus at 20:51 on 28 January 2004  Report this post
Agree with the rest, your 'experimentation' works. Interesting subject matter. What really struck me though, was that maybe, it wasn't the expectations of others that apply the pressure. Afterall, they are providing "encouragment", albeit "supposed".

Just a thought.

The Walrus
x

Bobo at 10:05 on 29 January 2004  Report this post
Walrus - indeed, it's one's own pressure that weighs most heavily - BUT ( get-out clause ) others' encouragement just fans the flames. Glad you think it works as a piece.

Lisa x


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