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Look at me

by James Graham 

Posted: 21 November 2014
Word Count: 132
Summary: For this week's challenge.


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Look at me

Look at me.
You see, I suppose,
an old, stupid face.

You ask yourselves
what is the use of me.
I move the seas around.
I am a pale, cold sun:
I let you sometimes see
your way on a dark road,
though wandering clouds
too often mask my false day,
and I am not wanted
in your cities. But you

should remember this:
from time to time
a person who was mad
in a certain way, has looked
me in the eye. I am waiting:

the blue Earth I look upon
is fearful; you have troubles
darker than any dark. I wait
for a new night-walker who will
catch my eye, and be struck,
and be your guide. I am

wiser than you think.
It may be soon.






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V`yonne at 23:44 on 21 November 2014  Report this post

the blue Earth I look upon
is fearful; you have troubles
darker than any dark. I wait
for a new night-walker who will
catch my eye, and be struck,
and be your guide.


WOW

I often hesitate to suggest changes for you James but I really think you could leave out

Look at me.
You see, I suppose,
an old, stupid face.

You ask yourselves
what is the use of me.


or instead of an old stupid face a face familiar and taken for granted? Just thought but I loved where this went!

Bazz at 15:26 on 23 November 2014  Report this post
Hi James, love the imagery here, the dramatic sense of the moon as an impassive onlooker yet a powerful force, evokes something very mythic, very thoughtful. It's an interesting idea that the moon influences more than tides, and makes for a very forceful poem.
 

crowspark at 15:38 on 23 November 2014  Report this post
Great take on the challenge and I love all after:
the blue Earth I look upon
is fearful

Good poem!


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