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Sour fruit
Posted: 21 January 2004
Word Count: 74
Summary: A little bit of catharsis about someone I'm not very fond of! Better out than in...
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This piece and/or subsequent comments may contain strong language.
Beneath the sugary smile
and butter-wouldn't-melt-in-your-mouth niceties,
I see the truth thunder through -
you want to beat my skull in with a baseball bat.
I think you tried to like me,
once - long ago,
but now all that's on offer is hatred,
albeit caked in your fluffiness.
Oh yes....your abhorrent fucking fluffiness -
Jesus, I hate it so!
Get real Bitch.
Take the knife from my back;
I stopped bleeding long ago.
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 Fearless at 17:26 on 21 January 2004
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Oooh I like this quite a lot. Been feeling rather 'Grrrrrr' at the world for the last two weeks, biting everyone's head off, etc - not that it was their fault. Aftel all that, my anger, malice, etc was distilled into something similar to your lyric, hence the birth of 'Ay cabron' and a couple of others.
fear
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roovacrag at 17:59 on 21 January 2004
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Remind me not to turn my back on you. Very good,getting your temper out in the open.Best to write it down than take action.xxx Alice
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miffle at 19:16 on 21 January 2004
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A very vehement lyric (rhythm and sense e.g. 'truth thunder through') and, cleverly, a sense of violent designs in both directions...Could feel the physically feel the catharsis and, as someone who doesn't tend to swear very cathartic in fact to read - Damn It! Shit Bugger FucK!
nikki ;-)
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NB meant to write 'could physically feel the catharsis...'
SHit! BuGGer! FucK!
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Bobo at 22:29 on 21 January 2004
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Nikki - calm down girlie! No need to go on an expletive binge!
Glad you liked my 'venting' session!
BoBo x
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dr_mandrill at 15:52 on 22 January 2004
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Abhorrent fluffiness- those ones are the worst, aren't they? A really effective poem, it really got my back up.
dm
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Bobo at 16:03 on 22 January 2004
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Dr M - 'fluffy bunny' type people really out to be mass-exterminated, especially when underneath there's a tendency for hardcore bastardom! Glad you liked the poem - think this might be the start of my Hatred period... ( no menstruation jokes, if you please! )
BoBo x
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oops - 'ought'
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ShayBoston at 14:56 on 23 January 2004
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This woman works in my office. How do you know her?! Very funny and oh so true.
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Account Closed at 22:35 on 23 January 2004
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Love it!!! Reminds me of Byron in a mood of personal satire - great stuff. Particularly love the way the last lines of the 2 last lines rhyme - very satifying indeed.
Anne B
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Bobo at 10:13 on 24 January 2004
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Shay / Anne - thanks - glad you liked it! I'm thankful that people like this exist - great material!
BoBo x
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