The Waves Return
Posted: 19 January 2004 Word Count: 127
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The Waves Return
Down amongst the bladderwrack popping like bubble wrap bubbles like sequins on the sun drenched sand the tide is retreating exposing bleached ribs of dead ships from past trips lying indecent till the waves return
Cat’s cradle ropes weave green over blue reef knot rings on the harbour wall brief respite while the waders prise the limpets from the rust encrusted fishing boat hull stranded, beached, lying askew and gulls on the foreshore scan the horizon patiently waiting for the waves' return
Cracked and weathered tarpaulin rocks stoically embrace the foaming spumes backwash mist rises from the surf spectral light shines rainbow hues taut ropes echo the pull of the moon waking the boats from overturned torpor proud bows buoyant on the waves' return
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roovacrag at 13:47 on 19 January 2004
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I enjoyed this as it is different. liked the first line.
Down amongst the bladder wrack. Well done. xx Alice
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Fearless at 17:25 on 19 January 2004
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Impressive Ellie. I felt the cold breeze against my cheek, could hear the gulls, taste the salt water...and marvel at the rainbow. Thanks for transporting me for that one moment.
fearless
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poemsgalore at 18:26 on 19 January 2004
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I loved the first verse, particularly the first two lines. Well actually, I loved all of it Ellenna. Like Fearless, I could taste the salt and feel the breeze.
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bluesky3d at 19:11 on 19 January 2004
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Ellie, you have magically recreated your experience so that others can enjoy the same feelings - one can ask no more of a poem... wonderful.
Andrew :o)
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dr_mandrill at 02:49 on 20 January 2004
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This made me want to be at the coast, and I hate the seaside!
Well done, very evocative, great to see some of my favourite words- limpet, askew, spume, torpor- all in the same poem.
dm
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Ellenna at 14:32 on 20 January 2004
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Alice,Nell,Fearless, Kathleen,Andrew and DM.. thank you for reading and enjoying this poem.. yes it's the Cornwall coast and when I wrote this it had been an unusually wonderful sunny springlike day... glad you liked the words dm..and thank you all for commenting :)
Ellie...
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buccaneer at 15:45 on 12 February 2004
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You must love the sea, your description is spot on. Very good.
PS, It was Salcombe.
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engldolph at 11:01 on 27 March 2004
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Hi Ellie,
Oh I am sooo looking forward to going back to Dorset coast this summer.thanks for reminding me...
I liked this a lot ... vidid imagery.. for some reason the first verse was different in feeling to the rest, and in some ways the verse I really loved..
best wishes
Mike
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