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Alderley

by Gildenel 

Posted: 10 May 2013
Word Count: 255
Summary: Hi this is my first piece of work, it is 40 pages at present, and contains pics it is partly local history and part mythology.


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Before we look at the most popular versions of the legend, Alderley Edge possesses not one but two tales which command interest and respect. The first, that of the Wizard, is still in motion and development. There is however a second, almost forgotten tale, which is intertwined with the tale of the Wizard, but yet, despite its apparent greater historicity, has rarely been recounted or examined in any detail. It is that of the unfortunate servant girl Ellen Beck – popularly known as ‘Nell’ Beck, who like the Wizard, knew where to find that entry to the underworld, The Iron Gates. In its most developed form Nell Beck’ tale is a tale about an uneducated servant woman betrayed in love, told by the aristocratic and literate daughter of a lord – who chooses her material with care, but who suppresses aspects unpalatable to the mid-victorian sensibility
and that is the sad tale of Ellen beck, this was an actual historical person and recorded in the parish register at wilmslow she sighted the iron gates, which are a pivotal part of the legend, and described them as a pair of folding iron gates situated not far from the holy well, but when she returned to show another person the gates were no where to be found, after this the tale of her life is a sad one. (An Eleanor Beck was baptized at Wilmslow church on 13 February 1721, which would make her of the right age for there to have been an historical Nell beck)






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James Graham at 20:08 on 13 May 2013  Report this post
There’s no doubt this is an interesting subject, even to someone (like me) who doesn’t live in the area and has never visited it. It would be of local interest, but just possibly wider interest too, as there is a readership interested in folk legends and their sources in actual historical events and lives.

I feel you need to give us a larger sample, however. I find myself really eager to know the tale of the Wizard, which is only hinted at; and the story of Ellen Beck seems incomplete:

after this the tale of her life is a sad one


- I wish I knew the whole of it! This is a fascinating hint:

told by the aristocratic and literate daughter of a lord – who chooses her material with care, but who suppresses aspects unpalatable to the mid-victorian sensibility


but it would be interesting to have some references and quotes to illustrate this. Could you give us a bit more?

There are some punctuation etc errors to be corrected, especially capitals at some of the names. Also there’s some confusion caused by this bit -

this was an actual historical person and recorded in the parish register at wilmslow


being placed in the sentence at that point. What you say here could be left out because it’s said in your last sentence anyway. And the last sentence doesn’t need to be in parenthesis, does it?

Let me know what you think. I would feel better able to comment if your passage was quite a bit longer than this.

James.

loopilil at 21:09 on 13 May 2013  Report this post
Hello,
I also feel this is a fascinating topic of historic interest. As James has already commented this is too short a piece to get the full facts and I am not sure if this is the beginning or if there is an introduction briefly explaining what the legend is about.
There are a few gramatical adjustments which would make reading a little smoother. I know I have a cheek as my grammar tends to be diabolical at times.
The line "...Nell Beck’ tale is a tale about..." could be slightly rearranged to avoid the repeat of the same word. Also from this point until the end it is all one long sentence which can make it more difficult to read.
I would love to read more of this as it is not an area I know at all and I love local historical articles. What type of publications are you hoping will be interested?

Gildenel at 12:30 on 14 May 2013  Report this post
Thanks for your feedback, James and loopilil, will post more, this part is actually an unfinished draft so sorry about that, couldn't access the pc to post part of the actual manuscript which was pretty bad of me considering I was asking for opinions, so I will log in on the pc and post from there.

Jennifer1976 at 12:38 on 14 May 2013  Report this post
I'd definitely be interested to read a longer article if you expand on this at some point. You've given enough detail to interest me in the story and now I want to know more.

This reads very much like a first draft, written to give us a flavour of what you intend to write more about. I think it would work well if you give us a good background of the Victorian society of which the story is set to give some good contrast. It isn't a part of the country I know very well, but there are always plenty of people interested in stories with a local flavour and incorporating the mythical element could work well too. I'd be interested to know what sort of publication you were thinking of, or would this be more like a chapter in a book?

My only criticism is that you've got some long, clumsy sentences there, just broken up with commas. I also wasn't keen on the last sentence being in brackets. But I appreciate that this may be a first draft and if you fix a couple of things I think it would work just fine as a longer piece.

Jenny

Jennifer1976 at 12:39 on 14 May 2013  Report this post
Oops, think we crossed posts there and you've answered my questions! I look forward to reading the revised version.

Jenny


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