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Propped Up
Posted: 15 January 2004
Word Count: 26
Summary: Sometimes it can feel as though the expectations of others are too much of a burden...
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I sway,
vertiginous,
on this pedestal.
So clumsy,
unbefitting
its beauty.
Such a pillar
of expectancy
cannot support
my frame,
nor bestow
unto me
its dignity.
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 poemsgalore at 18:30 on 15 January 2004
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You took the words right out of my mouth Bobo, other people's dreams are difficult to fulfil. Brilliantly conveyed.
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Bobo at 18:34 on 15 January 2004
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Hi Kathleen - thanks for your comment. It's hard enough trying to fulfil one's own dreams, let alone having to play-out others'! Though it's great to feel loved, obviously, sometimes the expectation which accompanies that love can be just too much.
BoBo x
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The Walrus at 09:12 on 16 January 2004
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Yup, good one Bobo. The house of love should be unconditional and any expectations left on the doorstep upon entering.
The Walrus
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tinyclanger at 18:30 on 16 January 2004
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Sharp and concise, BoBo, like it a lot. 'Pillar of expectancy" is great, as are the last couple of lines.
Also, did you deliberately structure it in this way - tall and thin - suggesting the pedestal itself?
tc
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Bobo at 18:57 on 16 January 2004
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tc - well-spotted that woman!!! Yes - thought the format added to it. Glad you liked it tc - means a lot!
BoBo x
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Fearless at 16:40 on 19 January 2004
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BoBo
Pedestals are always a problem - who'd want to fall off? As a guy once remarked to a girl 'guys only put girls on a pedestal to look up their skirt'. She was suitably unimpressed with this example of street philosophy.
Expectations cannot be avoided, but they can be moderated, ignored, denied, etc - just like everything else. A good poem.
fearless
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