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Posted: 15 January 2004
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A dog
With two tails,
Spiralling delirium
Unparalleled.
Suspended in
Drug-free stupor
Quivering
With covert
Knowledge.
The random
Accumulation of
Burdensome baggage
Gladly
Jettisoned.
The grimy accumulation
Of time
Zealously
Scrubbed clean.
Inside out,
Stripped,
Exposed,
Lying cosmically
Bared,
The eyes
Have found
Their gleam.
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 Fearless at 09:58 on 15 January 2004
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An enthusiastic, abstract reworking of 'I am the walrus'. I like the last stanza.
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Account Closed at 12:07 on 15 January 2004
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Walrus,
A good poem, but it reminded me of animal-testing in some strange way, is it just me or have I lost the plot completely? :)
Steven
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The Walrus at 12:25 on 15 January 2004
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Lol... no Steven you have not lost the plot... the imagery is kinda random... and, having reread it, I felt an overwhelming urge to don my 'Marigolds'. Weird huh? However, for a horror fiction writer, I guess you would have errr... a kinda unusual take on it. :)
Thanks for commenting.
The Walrus
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roovacrag at 15:07 on 15 January 2004
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I agree with Steven thought it was animal testing, then thought of a dog with 2 tails it wags twice as much.Might break my leg but a great feeling. I enjoyed reading it . xxxxxxxxxxxx Alice
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Account Closed at 15:28 on 15 January 2004
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Walrus,
I just had to see if anyone else thought of horror when they read this poem. Here’s how I interpreted it:
"A dog with two tails", animal testing, genetic mutation.
"Spiralling delirium", conjures up the images of pain from the spine. A pain that's "Unparalleled".
"Suspended in Drug-free stupor", no anaesthetic, ouch.
"Quivering with covert knowledge", shaking in pain and agony, unable to tell of the horror it's been subjected to.
"The random Accumulation of Burdensome baggage", that's just sick, bloody tissue exposed, gory fluids, this is frightening!
"Gladly Jettisoned.", now you're just being gory for the sake of it :)
"The grimy accumulation Of time", and how long has this two tailed dog been on the operating table?, horrible.
"Zealously Scrubbed clean.", scientists with their hypocritical cleanliness.
"Inside out, Stripped, Exposed, Lying cosmically Bared" what horrible images these words bring. Very H.P. Lovecraft there, 'cosmically bared'.
"The eyes Have found Their gleam.", the look an animal gets in it's eyes when they're terrified, could also be the look of glee in the scientist's eyes as they look at their experiments.
See, and Alice though it was about animal testing too, lol. You've written a powerful poem here and it horrified me :) In a nice way of course.
Steven McNay
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Bobo at 18:08 on 15 January 2004
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Walrus - obviously I'm not on the same alternative intellectual plain as other commentators as for me the poem conjured no adverse imagery. Rather, I read it as a declaration of ecstatic freedom, a rebirthing. Maybe I'm just a bit too simple to see the grotesqueness...???
BoBo x
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poemsgalore at 18:26 on 15 January 2004
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Actually, I just thought it was someone high on something and sounding off in the best kind of way, creatively. Like the line:
"The grimy accumulation
Of time
Zealously
Scrubbed clean."
It could also be someone with O.C.D.
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The Walrus at 09:06 on 16 January 2004
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OK, Steven, I give up, you're right. The evidence you have to support your view that this is a horror poem, is overwhelming. Your interpretation is fascinating and flawless.
Bobo and Poemsgalore, thanks, ecstatic freedom and feeling high on life was actually where I was coming from on this. (Incidentally, what's O.C.D?)
For a poem that was inspired by exuberance, it is now scaring the S*&@ out of me.
Thanks all for your comments. Much appreciated.
The Walrus
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Marcus1 at 14:16 on 18 January 2004
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Steven
I love your comments on this,
Amazing how the same words can be interpretted so differently and justafiably.
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The Walrus at 07:43 on 19 January 2004
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Poemsgalore, thanks for the OCD explanation.
Marcus, yes.
(Incidentally, for the record, I love my dog and, can confirm she has only one tail last time I looked).
The Walrus
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Marcus
Endorse your comments re Steven's. Amazing huh?
The Walrus
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