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Garden of Verse

by James Graham 

Posted: 14 December 2012
Word Count: 125
Summary: Well, I was quite chuffed with Dave's latest poem. And it has given me an idea. If poetry is like dining, it can be like one of my other favourite pastimes too - gardening.


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Garden of Verse

Some like
formality:

neat little couplets
and tercets of lawn,
gentian-pentameters,
stanzas of box-hedge,
sonnets of cypress

But I prefer free:

banks of herbaceous imagery, red
and gold metaphors, similes lush
as snowdrifts. There’s room

for wild words too, colloquial daisies,
the vulgar ragwort. Some verses

tend to straggle, must be pruned,
dead wood lopped off - but I like
the poem to form its natural
habit. A little cameo

is nice: a border, east-facing,
of Tanka japonica. But mostly free,

just keeping the edges tidy,
not letting the cliches spread.

I see a mighty epic,
deep-rooted, many-branched,
filling the space at the end of my dreams,
good for a thousand years

but there’s not enough room.
There’s room for a folly.








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joanie at 20:43 on 15 December 2012  Report this post
This really made me smile, James. I love the accurate references and the cross-over from poetry to gardens, and vice versa.
not letting the cliches spread
is excellent.

Just delightful!

joanie

Dave Morehouse at 18:39 on 20 December 2012  Report this post
Glad I could be an inspiration of sorts, James. This is beautifully done. I am an avid organic gardener and forager so this rings perfectly true to me.

neat little couplets
and tercets of lawn,
gentian-pentameters,
stanzas of box-hedge,
sonnets of cypress

This section is perfect. Musical to read and clever as anything.

I see a mighty epic,
deep-rooted, many-branched,
filling the space at the end of my dreams,
good for a thousand years,

but there’s not enough room.

You're the grammarian so I could easily be wrong but does there need to be a comma after "years"? It seems jarring to me and if it isn't necessary the line break seems to serve the purpose here. (Or am I highlighting my ignorance once again?)

This poem is wonderful and something that I would like to read in a journal at some point. Dave

James Graham at 14:45 on 21 December 2012  Report this post
Thanks, Joanie and Dave. This one could just possibly be submitted elsewhere. Yes, sometimes the line-break makes punctuation unnecessary, so I will change that.

James.

V`yonne at 18:37 on 04 January 2013  Report this post
Perhaps a little haiku somewhere in there? Loved it James. It's neat and wild all at once a veritable cottage garden of a poem.

Midnight_Sun at 09:38 on 18 January 2013  Report this post
Really enjoyed reading this James,

my favourite lines being:

But I prefer free:

banks of herbaceous imagery, red
and gold metaphors, similes lush
as snowdrifts. There’s room

for wild words too, colloquial daisies,
the vulgar ragwort.


The herbaceous imagery, wild words, colloguial daisies and the vulgar ragwort really appeal to me

Patricia

<Added>

colloquial even


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