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Summer Day

by kbostic31 

Posted: 31 May 2012
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Summer Day

The world is orange with hints of yellow
Atlas we can begin to mellow

A bird over head glides in the breeze
The buzzing stops by the honey bees

A flower sweats the heat of the day
And I wonder just what may

Begin to blossom upon the green grass
For the sun of fire is gone at last






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poemsgalore at 13:55 on 04 June 2018  Report this post
Hello Kbosti31,
It's the beginning of June as I read this. Yesterday was just such a day as the one you have written about. Oh, how the heat bursts out of every line. I particularly love the line "A flower sweats the heat of the day". Just curious, but is there a need for a capital letter at the beginning of every line? Not that it detracts from the poem in any way, nor does the lack of punctuation - not for me anyway.

I did enjoy the poem though, and look forward to reading more. I like the brevity of the piece, but it drew me in, so I would have felt very comfortable had it been longer.
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