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Birthday Celebration

by tusker 

Posted: 30 May 2012
Word Count: 87
Summary: To kick start my own challenge this simple poem for an old family friend's birthday

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In wartime she drove an ambulance.
Today she aims her car.
An angry young man blasts his horn.
She points to a mobile stuck to
His ear.

At home her anxious daughter asks,
'Where on earth have you been?’
‘Helped an old lady at checkout,’ she replies.
‘Poor woman must’ve been at least
Eighty three.’

She enters her sitting-room and is
surprised by a loud, unified cheer.
‘Happy Ninetieth Birthday,’
Friends and family sing to the
Sound of her laughter and a
Cork popping from celebration

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Nella at 07:29 on 30 May 2012  Report this post
Really nice, Jennifer. A heart-warming sort of thing. I love that line
Today she aims her car.

The use of aim in that context is surprising and enjoyable.

Thanks for the kick-start. I hope I'll be getting something down soon!


V`yonne at 11:32 on 30 May 2012  Report this post
I love it when old people don't think they're old and I loved that line too - aims her car It's SCARY! A lovely poem.

tusker at 11:42 on 31 May 2012  Report this post
Thanks Robin. Hope it gets you going.


tusker at 11:43 on 31 May 2012  Report this post
Thanks Oonah. Gwen does aim her car. Her daughter won't go out with her.


Dave Morehouse at 15:40 on 31 May 2012  Report this post
Agreed with the others as to how the first two lines interact. Well done indeed. I used to accompany an accordionist at the local old folks homes. He always felt that 'those old people' enjoyed the music. He was 86 at the time and many of the people in the homes were younger than he was. He's passed on now but this poem reminded me of him. Thanks for that, Dave.

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