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My Bunny Valentine
Posted: 04 April 2012 Word Count: 88
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Soft breeze ruffles downy fur carries new grass scent and fertile earth to keen rabbit noses.
Doe rises onto haunches licks cottontail paw then pulls down long ear to comb and clean.
Buck adores the way her nose and whiskers twitch the way she gently bumps her cheek against his when they are alone.
Bucks big brown eyes gaze into hers love undiminished by the passing of time. Doe offers her nose as he leans forward to touch it with his kiss she whispers gently… I love you.
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V`yonne at 12:41 on 04 April 2012
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Dave you great big SOFTIE Love it. Especially
Doe rises onto haunches
licks cottontail paw then
pulls down long ear
to comb and clean. |
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which is very visual.
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tusker at 14:49 on 04 April 2012
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This is lovely, Dave.
I'm a sucker for animal stories/poems as long as they're not sad. This one is very romantic.
Jennifer
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Oh, I love the title. Very apt.
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dharker at 16:21 on 04 April 2012
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LOL! Yes Oonah the big softie in me has emerged - Can you tell I have a new lady in my life?? Thank you both for your kind words, I'm glad you like it!
Dave
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Dave Morehouse at 16:40 on 04 April 2012
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Dave - The world could certainly use a few more 'softies' as of late. As a hopeless (Helpless?) romantic I enjoyed this poem. Beyond the lovely story, pun intended, I found the descriptive stanzas well done. The use of 'buck' and 'doe' rather than boy/girl or male/female gives us a genuine look in at the bunny couple. It's as if we are voyeurs standing at the garden gate. Like love is happening on our watch. Nicely done, Dave.
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dharker at 16:43 on 04 April 2012
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Thanks Dave - we softies need to stick together! LOL! Thank you for your comments!
Dave
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Nella at 19:59 on 04 April 2012
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What a romantic! Lovely story there.
As far as the poem goes, however, I almost think you could do without the last two lines - just stop with the image of the "nosey" kiss. What do you think?
Robin
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Neezes at 08:47 on 07 April 2012
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I agree about the use of buck/doe, that's a nice touch.
Well done, Dave - not entirely my cup of tea as a poem, to be honest, but I'm glad you're in a good place!
Jonathan
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