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Holiday of a Lifetime
Posted: 28 February 2012 Word Count: 79 Summary: For Robin's challenge
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Let’s all go on a Costa-lot-a Cruise. If a fire starts or if she lists, the crews know just what to do.
Where’s the risk? We’re surrounded by water for God’s sake go below -- we ought-a be okay. A thousand people against the sea. The sea’s outnumbered and you can see islands lit up in the fire’s romantic glow.
The captain has depth of conviction – there’s safety in numbers. Costa-lot-a Cruises – a must, must, must
Muster.
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Nella at 11:36 on 28 February 2012
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Oh, excellent, Oonah! Very tongue-in-cheek.
Love this:
A thousand people against the sea. |
| I also like this thought: How people think they are so invincible against catastrophy.
Well done!
Robin
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V`yonne at 11:48 on 28 February 2012
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And I didn't even buy a newspaper - there it was on the internet ; I might put this one on my blog.
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Neezes at 12:15 on 28 February 2012
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Nice irony there... I loved the bit about the sea being outnumbered, perhaps that could be tied in closer to the 'for god's sake' with some reference/mythologising of the sea?
Great word play and internal rhymes...
I wondered if the last line would have more impact if it was just "a must, must, muster."
Cheers,
Jonathan
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tusker at 17:46 on 28 February 2012
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You're on the ball, Oonah. Quick too!
Enjoyed this. Shows the perils of cruising. No way I'd set foot on what I term a floating coffin.
Loved: islands lit up in the fire's romantic glow.
Jennifer
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Dave Morehouse at 18:14 on 28 February 2012
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"Depth of conviction" - Very clever. I also liked the play on words in line 1. The first stanza which is a loose limerick sets the tone wonderfully for me. Agreed with Jonathon about the one too many 'musts'. It breaks my rhythm...unless, of course, it represents a capsize. In that case it's perfect. Dave
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V`yonne at 19:45 on 28 February 2012
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I was thinking of all those people sliding to one side as well as the advertising mechanism - yes, Dave. I'm glad this went down well - a bit tacky of me to be honest ;
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