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The Playful Giant

by M. Close 

Posted: 13 February 2012
Word Count: 243
Summary: For the conversation challenge


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The playful Giant

There once was a giant who liked to play
With the villagers every sunny day
He would pick them up and throw them high
He liked to watch the villagers fly

He tried to catch them as they fell
And most he did, but some...oh well
He had lots of villagers to fly around
So he didn't worry if some hit the ground

Soon, the villagers had had enough
They didn't enjoy this flying stuff
He had to know his game was done
They had to tell him this was no fun

They tangled his legs with rope so thick
He fell to the ground, hard and quick
he crashed through trees and fell on his face
and left a big dent in the ground in that place

They stood on his nose and looked in his eye
They told him "Us villagers don't like to fly"
"now leave us alone, don't throw us around
or once again you'll end up on the ground"

He got the point and found a new way
to have fun with the villagers each sunny day
He filled the dent in the earth he had made
he filled it with water then sat in the shade

the villagers would come and jump off his toes
and dive from the tip of his big ugly nose
they would swim in the lake, laugh and play
and the giant had fun with them each sunny day






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V`yonne at 16:44 on 13 February 2012  Report this post
Well I like that I think there are a couple of places where you could rethink the easy option but what a grand start! Nice little story.

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Well - Narrative poem - I should say...

Neezes at 18:06 on 14 February 2012  Report this post
Really enjoyed this, Mike - terrific humourous fable, I can see it would be great for the kids. Loved the bit about throwing the villagers in the air,and also the images of them diving off his nose at the end

Jonathan

Dave Morehouse at 12:44 on 15 February 2012  Report this post
I can visualize your grandkids scolding the giant as you read this one aloud. Nice work and I agree with Jonathon that throwing the villagers in the air is a clever bit. Would you rather use "We villagers..." in s.5? Regardless, this one made me smile. Dave

tusker at 15:08 on 17 February 2012  Report this post
A great visual poem, Mike.

I can imagine it in a children's book with marvellous illustrations. It's hard to write for and please children and there's a good market out there if a writer is able to.

Jennifer

M. Close at 16:22 on 17 February 2012  Report this post
Thanks for your kind comments. I have been looking for an illustrator, but this will probably languish on the grand kid's computers and soon fade from memory....

Mike

tusker at 17:27 on 17 February 2012  Report this post
Don't let it!!

Jennifer

V`yonne at 23:20 on 17 February 2012  Report this post
Yeah - don't let it!

Nella at 16:28 on 18 February 2012  Report this post
What a great thing to do for the grandkids! They must have loved it.
Well done!

Robin


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