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Bananas Became Bats

by Jibunnessa 

Posted: 21 April 2003
Word Count: 161
Summary: In my novel 'Shaquilla's Papers', the main narrator, Shaquilla (when she was a teenager), wrote this poem about her eccentric Scottish neighbour, Brenda.


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Big, bearded Brenda
Believes bananas became bats
Biting bruised bodies
Bloodied by being bitten.

Big, bearded Brenda
Believes Brian bought Brenda
beautiful bromeliad bunches.
But Brian boarding boats,
Began bartending beside Bermudan beaches.

“Birds bury bottles beneath balaclava bulbs!
Bavarian beer boosted bright blue beetles
Because brandy becomes bluebells
Battling bravely between beastly Brazilian bees”
Babbled Brenda,
Beard boldly bobbing.

“Baked boysenberry biscuits before breakfast.
Beautifully brown!”
Boasted Brenda biting.

Big, bearded Brenda
Brought buttercup bunches.
Broken between brambles
Beneath big beech branches,
Blackberries bloodied Brenda’s body.

Brenda believes bananas became bats
Biting Brenda’s body.
Because Brian brought bromeliads,
Bats became barmy!
Bothered Brenda badly
Burying Brenda’s beauty
Beneath billion bloody bruises

Brenda becoming batty,
Built bonny bonfires,
Began banana burning.
But, boiling bananas
Blew banana
Bombs
Bombarding Brenda.

Brenda began bawling.
Bosoms brightly burning.


---Jib, 7.20 am, Huang Dao, China, 16 Aug 2001. From the novel, ‘Shaquilla’s Papers’. Shaquilla herself writes this as a teenager, about one of her neighbours.






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Jibunnessa at 22:39 on 21 April 2003  Report this post
'Bananas Became Bats' is a poem that Shaquilla (a character in my novel) wrote when she was a teenager. It's about Brenda, an eccentric Scottish neighbour, who lived down the road from her.

She was quite fond of the lady, and the idea of Brenda's based on a Glaswegian lady that used to live down the road from me. She wasn't really that batty or bearded, but suffered from extreme tinitous and frequently extremely drunk. I was very fond of her.

Anyway guys, do you think it works as part of a novel?

It's intentionally not that polished.

david bruce at 08:43 on 22 April 2003  Report this post
Bloody brilliant.

roger at 08:57 on 22 April 2003  Report this post
Bloody hell, you've done it again...and so has David - come on Jib, catch him out with an 'X' one. Actually, he'll probably say 'xtroidinary', so do 'Z'.

Jibunnessa at 09:49 on 22 April 2003  Report this post
Blushing brightly!

poemsgalore at 16:08 on 26 April 2003  Report this post
brows beetle bombastically! I'm stunned by this as I love playing with words and this is the ultimate word game - excellent.

olebut at 23:03 on 21 May 2003  Report this post
clearly clever composing certainly creates correctly
concise contributions covering complimentary concepts completely
charachterising children contiually chattering consistently.

tweed at 19:12 on 27 May 2003  Report this post
I think I know her.


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