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The Kindness of Strangers

by Gerry 

Posted: 07 July 2011
Word Count: 350
Summary: For Neezes' 236 challenge.


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He was a boy, just a boy ... What was the next bit? Jesus, Cat, chill. It’ll come once you’re in there.

In there. Oh, my God.

She was next. The boy before her had looked as if he was going to wet hisself. They called him, and he went in like it was a trip to an abattoir.

He was a boy, just a boy ... What the bugger did Blanche say after that?

Mum used to say, ‘What the hell are you going to do with your life, Catherine?’ giving her serious jip. But, yeah, she hadn’t a clue, not for ages. Then, suddenly last summer, Vivien was on the telly saying Fiddle-dee-dee and Tomorrow is another day and all that, and it was sorted. Mum still sceptical, mind, but it was what Cat wanted - to do that, be like that. Coz Vivien Leigh was cool. Mint. Banging. And going down such a total storm in the school play made the Drama teacher say, ‘You must try for the National Youth Theatre, Catherine.’

So, here she was.

He was a boy, just a boy. When I was a very young girl, when I was ... When I was bloody well what? Oh, bollocks.

‘Catherine Drake?’ The bloke was by the door, holding it open, smiling. She got to her feet, and followed him in.

Jesus, like a bloody barn in here. And she’d got to fill it. The bloke went to his table, and sat down, pencil poised. Calm now, Cat. Relax them shoulders. Show him you’re up for it, serious.

‘You’re sixteen, Catherine, yes?’

‘Yeah.’ She smiled. ‘Yeah ... That’s exactly right. I’m sixteen.’

‘Jolly good. So, when you’re ready. Streetcar, isn’t it?’

‘Mm.’

Head down a bit, Cat. Then up, but slow. The eyes, give him the eyes now. ‘He was a boy, just a boy, when I was a very young girl. When I was … sixteen, I made the discovery – love …’

The bloke was leaning forward, not taking notes. Just watching her. Really watching. Like people did. Watching Cat Drake.

Bingo.









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Desormais at 20:34 on 07 July 2011  Report this post

Terrific Gerry!

I can't see anything to criticise here. Even the name is just right - Cat. I got a perfect image of the girl, her personality, her drivers. And the moment itself.

Well done - loved it.

Sandra

Gerry at 20:42 on 07 July 2011  Report this post

Thanks very much Sandra. Really glad you liked it.

Cheers,

Gerry.

tusker at 08:28 on 09 July 2011  Report this post
Very good, Gerry. Enjoyed the read.

Jennifer

Gerry at 08:53 on 09 July 2011  Report this post

Thanks, Jennifer.

V`yonne at 13:13 on 10 July 2011  Report this post
That's so good! I was a bit confused til it got going and then when I gort my eye in and realised! Wonderful.

Gerry at 13:27 on 10 July 2011  Report this post

Thanks very much, Oonah. I really enjoyed writing it. And, see, I put some nice big spaces between the paragraphs! I have no idea why I didn't do this before. I am a dummy.

Cheers.

Neezes at 19:35 on 10 July 2011  Report this post
This was an excellent read, I found it totally absorbing, and it had a level of figuring it out at the beginning that I usually enjoy in a flash. The character came across really clearly for such a short piece, partly through the good language choices. Nice!

Jonathan

Gerry at 19:39 on 10 July 2011  Report this post

Thanks, Jonathan. Glad you enjoyed it.

Gerry


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