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Summer Vignettes: Part One

by kennyp 

Posted: 03 June 2011
Word Count: 120
Summary: A Flash fiction piece


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The quiet of the balmy afternoon was broken by a faint discordant tune from afar.

A sense of familiarity seemed to cross my mind as the muffled sound increased in volume.

Excited inaudible chatter mixed with giggles seemed to compete with the tune as it increased in volume.

A mini stampede of little feet descended to the direction of the tune as the origin of the sound grew closer.

Innocents hypnotised by the unknown musical pied piper.

The tune seemed to rise to a crescendo then abruptly end as unexpectedly as it started.

The silence broken by an excitable high unbroken voice:

“Vanilla ice cream mister.”

I smiled as the first ice cream van heralded the beginning of the summer.











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tusker at 15:21 on 04 June 2011  Report this post
What a delightful flash, Kenny.

A force of sound no child can resist.

I don't like 'If you go down to the woods today,' jingle they play around here. I find that tune rather scary for some odd reason.

Jennifer

V`yonne at 23:17 on 04 June 2011  Report this post
I don't know why you ended each sentence with a line break but I like the nostalgic air of this. We were just saying today that when it's fine there's never an icecream van but on a dull day slightly windy, 3 come down our street! Apparently when it's fine they all go to beaches and seaside car parks!

crowspark at 12:12 on 05 June 2011  Report this post
Lovely piece of nostalgia (I don't think ice cream vans have ever visited our part of the backwoods).

My only nit would be:
A mini stampede of little feet descended to the direction of the tune as the origin of the sound grew closer.

Think this could be simplified maybe?
Thanks for the read.

Bill

kennyp at 12:22 on 05 June 2011  Report this post
Hi Jennifer V'yonne

Thanks for reading and commenting on the piece.

Kenny

kennyp at 23:17 on 06 June 2011  Report this post
Hi Bill

Thanks for reading and commenting on the piece.

Kenny


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