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Baby Shower

by dharker 

Posted: 27 April 2011
Word Count: 650


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“Well Marge, what a lovely couple!”, Ken pronounced as they drove off the drive.

“You really think so?” was the frosty response. Ken sighed. The day had started so well…

Marge was bubbling with excitement; they were driving to see their first grandchild and the car was laden with gifts, including the “pre-loved“ but perfect three wheeled All Terrain Buggy, or ATB, that she’d bought on E-Bay. She’d been ecstatic when she'd won the item and was dying to tell her son and daughter-in-law all about it, but decided it would be so much nicer to see their faces when they unpacked it!

Peter and his wife Hazel were very keen runners and to avoid duplicating items, had listed the expensive ATB amongst other items on a baby shower list. The list was then addressed to both sets of parents and friends, with instructions to tick off the items being bought, and then to send it to the next on the address list. Being first Marge had ticked off her items and sent the email on, then set to the task with an enthusiasm that Ken had found most refreshing.

The journey passed without incident and they pulled onto their son’s driveway in fine spirits. Peter welcomed them with a hug and offered to help his dad unpack the car while Marge bustled happily into the house to meet her new granddaughter.

“Hello, I’m Catherine, Hazel’s mother, and you are?”, inquired the expensively and, in Marge’s opinion, over dressed woman who stood by the settee cuddling the baby.

“Erm, I’m Marjory”, she replied, somewhat taken aback.

At that moment Peter and Ken came in carrying the parcels from the car.

“Ahh, I see you’ve met Catherine, Hazel’s mum. Catherine, this is my mum and dad, Marge and Ken. Where’s dad?” asked Peter, placing the parcels on the floor.

Ken looked a little confused and was about to speak when Catherine replied,

“He’s in the kitchen with Hazel, Peter. “

“Ahh, thanks mum. I’ll let you three get acquainted while I go chivvy them up. You two must be dying for a cuppa.”

Marge bristled at their son’s familiarity with this woman.

“Hello! I’m Ken! We’re very pleased to meet you at last!”, Ken offered his hand which Catherine shook politely with one hand while still cradling the baby with the other. Ken smiled and looked at the baby.

“Well isn’t she just lovely! She’s got her father’s eyes hasn’t she!”

“Actually we rather thought she’d inherited the Van Daal eyes”, Catherine replied haughtily.

Stuck up cow, thought Marge, barely containing her urge to grab the baby.

“Could I hold her perhaps?”, she asked sweetly, reaching out for her granddaughter.

Catherine turned and, still cradling the baby, walked through the doorway, leaving Ken and Marge wondering whether to follow or not.

“Well this is an unexpected pleasure isn’t it Marge!”, Ken beamed, “I didn’t know they'd flown in from Cape Town!”

“Hmmmph”, was the best Marge could manage.

“Mum! Dad! Your tea’s ready…”

They wandered through to the kitchen where Hazel stood with a smartly dressed gentleman.

“Hello! I’m Jonathan, Hazel’s dad. So very pleased to meet you both at last!”

He smiled warmly as he shook Marge’s hand and then, shaking Ken’s hand, led him and Peter off into the garden.

“Come on chaps! I expect the ladies will want to have a gossip”.

Hazel grinned at her dad, then stood and hugged Marge.

“Good to see you Marge, shall we go through to the study? We were just looking at some of the things mum and dad bought for Evie”.

Catherine looked knowingly at Marge, a smile slowly spreading across her face. Marge wondered what on earth the woman was smiling at. But then, on entering the study, she saw the brand new, top of the range All Terrain Buggy in the middle of the room.

“KEN! We’re leaving!”






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Cornelia at 11:57 on 27 April 2011  Report this post
It can be tricky being the poor relation in a society that equates love with the price of gifts. To my mind it's up to the young pair to prevent this kind of embarrassment. Do we know how the scheme went wrong?

With added reservation about the ending, I though it very readable and would interst most grandparents/parents.

Sheila

dharker at 12:23 on 27 April 2011  Report this post
I think Catherines knowing smile suggests she'd deliberately bought the brand new ATB to a) show off their comparatively greater wealth and
b) to annoy her son-in-laws mother.

Having been in a similar situation, the one-upmanship that goes on can be quite ridiculous!

I hope at least you enjoyed the read Sheila.

Dave

fiona_j at 16:42 on 27 April 2011  Report this post
Hello,

I did have to read it a couple of times to understand what went wrong and so took tehe knowing smile to mean she did it on purpose.

The only thing that I don't think sits quite right is why the two sets of parents haven't met before. The couple are married and had given birth to their first child. They are within a days drive, so why haven't they met at the wedding, or during the pregnancy? I think if it's important to the plot, it needs to be explained briefly somewhere.

Apart from that, I thought the story was very amusing. One-upmanship is rife between parents.

Fi

dharker at 16:52 on 27 April 2011  Report this post
Thanks Fi! Point taken on board and they're now newly arrived from South Africa! Hope this makes it a little more readable.

Dave

tusker at 07:20 on 28 April 2011  Report this post
I enjoyed this, Dave.

Thank goodness one set of parents live in SA.

I'm thankful that I had lovely in-laws after reading this and knowing about other couples problems.

Jennifer

dharker at 07:27 on 28 April 2011  Report this post
Thanks Jennifer! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Funnily enough I get on better with my in-laws now I'm divorced! *chuckle*

Dave

Desormais at 15:40 on 29 April 2011  Report this post
I had to read it a couple of times, I think it was having so many names in a short flash. Unavoidable, of course. I could just see the wife's mother pretending to ignore the other mother when she asked if she could hold the baby. You've captured the two mothers quite vividly Dave. Enjoyed it, well done.

Sandra

dharker at 15:51 on 29 April 2011  Report this post
Thanks Sandra! ) Glad you enjoyed it! Yes I found it quite difficult having to keep to the word count and yet get the story across...

Dave

Prospero at 14:42 on 06 May 2011  Report this post
Oh yes, this sort of thing is such a minefield isn't it.

Especially, when oneupmanship is the order of the day, as it is here.

Well done, Dave.

Best

John


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